User:Mketter/Snowboarding/Tonylorenzo14 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mketter


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Snowboarding


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Snowboarding

Evaluate the drafted changes
Overall, I would like to inform you that you did a nice job on your article, but there are few things that could be done to improve it. To start, I believe you could shorten up your first sentence. It is a run on and doesn't flow as smooth as it could. I would also like to point out how there are a few grammar errors that could be fixed such as adding a space between the word "fracture" and the period. I believe adding a period after "Other minor injuries that happen are shoulder soft tissue injuries, ankle injuries, concussions, and clavicle fractures were seen injuries are very common" would make the sentence itself much cleaner and easier to digest. I would also like to point out that your final sentence doesn't have a period at the end of it. I believe that since you are adding a new article to the assignment that you should have more references to back up the information you are giving. You only have the one reference about the original article, you need to include some of your sources that you included into your bibliography. You are on the right track but i think you should give the article a proofread and insert your references to make it even better.