User:Mkf51/Race Suicide/Mannatd Peer Review

General info
mkf51
 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MeghanBedi

Joyy.c


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Mkf51/Race Suicide/Bibliography:User:Mkf51/Race Suicide
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Race suicide

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the article draft adds informative, additional information when contrasted with the original article. In the Political Implications and Language Section, I really appreciate that it is split up into subsections, which makes it more digestible. Two areas that I think could be improved is the use bolding and certain language. For me, it was unclear why the two bolded sentences were bolded and suggested that the author may be trying to impress upon me what they thought was most important (opinion, not objective -- against wiki rules). Additionally, this is very knit picky, but the use of the word "trope" in the Hypersexualization of Women of Color section implied an opinion given the negative connotation around that word. Maybe "this objectification" would be more suitable. Overall, I think your group did a terrific job of improving the article, and sources were appropriately added throughout.