User:Mkretzsch/Gamification/JeaneKinopio Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mkretzsch


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Gamification


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead:


 * 1) There is some good knowledge here. I think that sometimes the citations take away from the reading and may help to keep one citation on each instead.
 * 2) I think more information on the topic in this area would be beneficial. What is the point of gamification? What is the individual and contextual differences that exist? I think expanding on statements like this would benefit the reader too.

Overall impressions:


 * 1) There is a link that is broken in the criticism section.
 * 2) Overall, there is a lot of good information about the topic. Gamification is broken down extensively; however, I would like to see more cohesion between them. For example, there is a criticism section at the bottom, but I would like to see how each of the parts of gamification is looked at when you originally talk about them. Maybe that is a preference though.