User:Mksearcy/Anorexia nervosa/Emiell490 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mksearcy


 * Link to draft you're reviewing https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mksearcy/Anorexia_nervosa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists) https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mksearcy/Anorexia_nervosa?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Evaluate the drafted changes
- I cannot tell which edits are yours since they are not in a distinctive font, so I will give you suggestions from the current version of the article and the chunk included in your edit.

Lead

- The first paragraph of the lead of this article gives a great introduction and insight. I would leave it the way it is unless you discover something later. However, the entire lead section is long and rather overwhelming. At first glance it looks like something someone may be a little intimidated to read. If at all possible, consider shortening, simplifying, or organizing the 6 paragraphs of the lead section.

Content

- All content is relevant, updated, detailed, thorough and related to the topic. However, there are numerous subtopics. This can make the article overwhelming to read. If you see a way to reorganize the information in a less overwhelming way, I would do so.

- In your "Behavioral symptoms" edit, I noticed you added a definition for purging. This is a great addition as some may not know or understand what it is. Consider adding the link for the wikipedia page on purging as well.

Tone and Balance

- The content is all neutral and informational and does not influence toward any sides.

Sources and References

- All sources and references are accurate and plentiful. Links work correctly.

Organization

- Though the information is clear and concise, some of it is long and overwhelming. Some chunks, such as the introduction paragraphs, can be broken down and organized into a more manageable/easier to read way.

Overall Impressions

- This article is a good one full of helpful information, but a lot of information. I think overall the challenge might be organizing it a little bit better so that readers of this article will want to read it rather than feel overwhelmed by it.