User:Mkuulei6/Frozen yogurt/Saania Saxena Peer Review

General info
Mkuulei6
 * Whose work are you reviewing?
 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mkuulei6/Frozen_yogurt?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template:
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Frozen yogurt:

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Lead
Guiding questions:

Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?

Yes. The lead provides an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the topic of frozen yoghurt, involving alternate names, what it is, and its basic ingredients like dairy.

Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?

I feel the lead could include more of a description of the article's major sections. This could be concise but it should be present. For instance, the history of froyo, production, etc.

Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

The lead is concise as it doesn't go too much into detail about froyo, just gives an overview. I just feel the lead could include a little bit more information that is to come in the rest of the article just to give an overview. Like the gist of the production and history, for example.

Content
Guiding questions:

Is the content added relevant to the topic?

I thought the content added in the history section is very relevant as it goes more into detail about not just froyo's initial discovery but evolution up till the 21st century. Very key information is highlighted in a concise manner.

Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?

I thought that for the "Uses" subsection, it is a little bit confusing as it combines 2 ideas. One is the where frozen yoghurt is used (as in along which food items) and one is about the kinds of froyo we get: healthier, vegan ones, etc. Perhaps split these 2 ideas in 2 separate subsection, one being something like uses and other being the different types of froyo.

Tone and Balance
I thought overall the tone is very neutral and balanced and not subjective but rather objective and well-researched.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:

I felt overall the sources added for the new content are reliable and accurate and current (up to date) which all work. Perhaps I would suggest getting rid of links that are by personal blogs like...and stick to more credible peer reviewed articles/journals.

Organization
Overall the content is very concise and grammatically error-free.