User:Mlwoo/Environmental epigenetics/Noorchaudhryy Peer Review

Lead
The introductory sentence is a good way of defining epigenetics, but I think it should say something about environmental epigenetics as a whole instead, since that is what this article is about. In the beginning, it seems like this article is for just epigenetics. I love how concise the introductory paragraph is. It is well-rounded. Just introduce environmental epigenetics more in the first sentence.

Content
The content added thus far technically is relevant and up-to-date, but it does feel random. Simply introducing DNA methylation in randomly seems sudden. I would add a section above it introducing all possible mechanisms of epigenetics, including histone methylation, acetylation, etc. According to the guidelines, add in some content on equity gaps. One can suggest how exposure to harsher environments as a result of being underprivileged can lead to epigenetic alterations. For example, exposure to second-hand smoking can cause some.

Tone and Balance
Everything added thus far has been neutral, since this is a definitions based article for the most part.

Sources and References
A good list of references has been developed thus far. The first article seems slightly questionable but the last two are reputable!

Organization
As mentioned above, the order of some things does not make sense thus far. This is okay for now, since I think this group will fill in the gaps as they go. This is how my group is doing it. Try to flow into each new section to not cause confusion for readers. Jumping around from topic to topic gets frustrating for readers.

Images and Media
No images have been added thus far. Perhaps when talking about discoveries of epigenetic mechanisms such as methylation and acetylation, pictures of the respective scientists can be added.

General info

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User:Mlwoo/Environmental epigenetics


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Lead
The introductory sentence is a good way of defining epigenetics, but I think it should say something about environmental epigenetics as a whole instead, since that is what this article is about. In the beginning, it seems like this article is for just epigenetics. I love how concise the introductory paragraph is. It is well-rounded. Just introduce environmental epigenetics more in the first sentence.

Content
The content added thus far technically is relevant and up-to-date, but it does feel random. Simply introducing DNA methylation in randomly seems sudden. I would add a section above it introducing all possible mechanisms of epigenetics, including histone methylation, acetylation, etc. According to the guidelines, add in some content on equity gaps. One can suggest how exposure to harsher environments as a result of being underprivileged can lead to epigenetic alterations. For example, exposure to second-hand smoking can cause some.

Tone and Balance
Everything added thus far has been neutral, since this is a definitions based article for the most part.

Sources and References
A good list of references has been developed thus far. The first article seems slightly questionable but the last two are reputable!

Organization
As mentioned above, the order of some things does not make sense thus far. This is okay for now, since I think this group will fill in the gaps as they go. This is how my group is doing it. Try to flow into each new section to not cause confusion for readers. Jumping around from topic to topic gets frustrating for readers.

Images and Media
No images have been added thus far. Perhaps when talking about the discoveries of epigenetic mechanisms much as methylation and acetylation, pictures of the respective scientists can be added.

Great work, guys!