User:Mmcandrew/Capacocha

Hello!

I think that the work you have done thus far with revising the lead is fantastic! It really enhanced your article and gives the reader a very clear sense of what the article will be on. I also think that your article is very interesting! Here are some suggestions that I have for what could be improved:

-Some of the sections do not seem neutral in some (ex: child sacrifices). This section refers to the children sacrificed as victims, which leans towards the side that child sacrifices are "bad" therefore not being neutral.

-Adding some images would be nice in order to further enhance the article. Maybe you could add an image of the offerings given to the bodies in order to provide the reader with a visual.

-Some of the sections seem to only have information from one source. Finding other sources that further back up this information will enhance the article and strengthen the information.

- I would break up the child sacrifices section into subsection, because it is very long in length and tedious to read.

Overall, I think you've already made some awesome progress to your project and I hope that my comments can help you develop this article further. Let me know if you have any questions. Great job!

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