User:Mmg0023/Emetophobia/Doyouwannaplayagame Peer Review

I am peer reviewing the User Mmg0023. To begin I think your additions to the article are mostly successful and work out in the article. I like how you added Signs to the section Causes to let people know that the section will help them learn the signs also and not just the causes of Emetophobia. I agree with your thought to remove the sentence "Some suggest that individuals with emetophobia are victims of childhood abuse – sexual or physical. Although this is occasionally true, it seems to be no more prevalent than in the general population (Christie, 2004)." As I was researching Emetophobia, I also did not find any information on this particular topic. In your addition to the article “Some possible signs include avoid eating certain types of foods, consistently checking food expiration dates, being weary of what you touch and come in contact with due to germs, avoiding people that are not feeling good, regularly washing your hands, making sure bathrooms are near, steering clear from traveling and crowds, and checking yourself to see if you are sick.” I would change avoid to avoiding certain foods instead of avoid eating certain foods for the article to read smoother. In this part of the section I would change “being weary of what you touch and come in contact with due to germs” to  - being weary of what you touch due to germs. While I think you could still use your original section, I think it would sound cleaner without the added words. In the sentence “These three are very common, because people who fear vomiting are often terrified of doing so, or encountering it, in a public place.” In this section you said you were going to take out, or encountering it, because it sounded wrong. This is actually called a nonessential clause and is used correctly. Your next section you changed is also the same thing “Eating out may also avoided, if possible,” You again don’t need to remove this because it is a nonessential clause. In this same sentence, you need to add the word be, which would then make it read. “Eating out may also be avoided, if possible,”. I think the rest of your revisions are read well and are overall successful in your article.

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