User:Mmhaque3/Aladdin (1958 film)/Apple1421 Peer Review

Whose work are you reviewing?
Mmhaque3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mmhaque3/Aladdin_%281958_film%29?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Aladdin (1958 film)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think this is a good start to your article! It gets a bit confusing as your mentioning specific scenes and then going on to connect that to a sense of morality within the film. I feel that a subheading would help orient your reader and show them what exactly you're trying to explain. I think a more detailed explanation of the scenes your referencing would also help as some people may never have seen the film or haven't seen it in a while. Are your ideas about forgiveness of the heart, self trust, and self care your ideas or did you find those from a source? I also think your references could be a bit more detailed. I'm not completely sure, but I bet you could find a date and author for the journal and book references. There are also a couple grammatical/spelling mistakes such as writing "seen" rather than "scene." Overall I think you have a solid idea that just needs some tweaking. Nice start!