User:Mmille12/Abu'l-Hasan (artist)/April.k0ala Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mmille12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mmille12/Abu'l-Hasan_(artist)?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Abu'l-Hasan (artist)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead section is short and concise. Maybe you could emphasize that Abu'l-Hasan wasn't just any Mughal miniature painter, but he was a highly skilled and highly regarded painter given the title "Wonder of the Age" by Jahangir himself. It would be helpful to add a citation to this information (since the original article lacks one for the Lead). In general if you happen to come across information in your research which is already in the article -- such as his birth year or info about his father --, it would strengthen the article to cite the source(s). The content you have added is very relevant to the topic, and it also provides a deeper understanding of Abu'l-Hasan. If possible, it would be interesting to read about another one of Abu'l-Hasan's artworks (though I understand this may be a challenge since few of his works survive to this day). The last sentence in the "Biography" section reads as analysis rather than a neutral, fact sharing tone. I would suggest expanding on the developments of Mughal paintings at the time he was active or removing the sentence. The original text that the painting is "...definitely not Ustad Mansur's style" also reads as analysis/interpretation. Overall though, this article draft keeps a neutral, balanced approach. The original article lacks any citations and references, so it is very valuable that you have gathered five references. It's noteworthy that your sources come from a range of years, and I will be interested to see how they are more integrated in your final draft. Be sure to cite them using Wikipedia's footnote citation system (streamlined/available in the toolbar). I find your separating of the "Works" section into two paragraphs to be very effective. It reads better and strengthens the overall flow of the section. Also the content you have added is logically placed/inserted in the article. The article already has a good amount of images and media, especially given its current length. You could help improve the image captions such as by adding the medium (material) of each artwork. In your rough draft you have enhanced this article, and I look forward to seeing how it further develops as you incorporate more information from your references.