User:Mmillerk/Ettore Sottsass/Chaiteaboba Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Kerstinagnew, Mmillerk, Robynmunzer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Ettore Sottsass


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ettore Sottsass

Evaluate the drafted changes
"Memphis Group" section: Good and informative paragraph on the work and influence of the Memphis Group under sottsass' leadership -- organized and clear. Neutrally written, and relevant to the topic giving readers a quick overall summary. I would just be careful with the first sentence of your paragraph when you mention who founded the group and where Sottsass founded it -- the sentence just above already discusses it, so maybe just find a way to combine the sentence above with your own work?

I'd also suggest just being slightly more clear when you say "Many criticized and said it was just a trend that wouldn't last," and specify who exactly criticized the group. Also, what exactly did they criticize -- the group's work? design philosophy? -- I'd just be slightly more clear with the wording.

Lastly, don't forget to add your sources and cite them within the paragraph-- I couldn't find which source(s) you referenced :)