User:Mmilne15/Sulis/CarlyBach Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mmilne15


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mmilne15/Sulis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sulis

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Marina!

I've enjoyed reading your article and believe you've done a great job working with your subject!

All the information that you have added is well written and relevant to the source while making the article much more informative. It is clear that there are sections which need further citation, but you have addressed this as something you are working on.

I looked at the full article as well as your draft additions and believe they will come together as a great source. If you are looking to add an additional section on Sulis I think it may be interesting to look at how Sulis was represented in art (i.e. sculpture? and/or painting?) This may be interesting in terms to her importance throughout history, while also looking at how she was depicted. You mentioned that there is not too much information written on Sulis herself, I am unsure of how much information there will be on her artwork, however this may lead to some more information. I do not think this is needed but it may be interesting. You may also be able to expand into the 'Modern Worship' section. I am unsure how much information there is on this, however only one line of information is published here, it may beneficial to further expand.

The source links provided do work, and provide credible and well cited information.

Overall, I think you have completed a great article draft and I do not have too much advice on how to further improve. The content you've added is well written, with the appropriate tone and balance. I look forward to reading your final published page! - Good luck!

Carly