User:Mmilne15/Sulis/Elycadiz Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mmilne15


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mmilne15/Sulis
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sulis

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Hi Marina,

I think the paragraph on using the Bath as a sacred sacrificial place is a very nice addition. It did not only improve the article but it also made it more interesting. Maybe adding a brief information on how the locals worshipped the Goddess would tie the whole idea of using the Bath as a sacrificial place.

The added paragraph on the Inscribed tablets section is a very good addition, however, it may have been written in an argumentative way. I think re-phrasing the second sentence will make it sound more neutral. For example, try adding "according to" or "based on this article" in the sentence to minimize the argumentative tone.

I think expanding on Sulis' curative power will also be very interesting.

All the information you've added so far made the article more rounded. I can't wait to read your finished article soon :)

-Lovely