User:Mminerp3/Mueang Fa Daet Song Yang, Thailand/Cwatters24 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Mminerp3


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mminerp3/Mueang_Fa_Daet_Song_Yang%2C_Thailand?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that there's a good foundation for this article here, and that now you can kind of get into the smaller details. I'd say the most pressing matter is that there aren't any citations marked in the article, only sources listed at the bottom so we don't know which sources contributed to the information on the page. The list of sources isn't bad, we can always make things more diverse but when the sites aren't as researched I can understand only having sources that come from a lot of the same researchers. Organizationally, I think the layout is good, but instead of making one of the sections of content be the titled the name of the site, just make that section the introduction, instead of the odd blurbs at the top about buddhism (which I assumed were just being drafted to add to the rest of the article). I think that you could make a whole section just dedicated to the history of excavations and research at the site so that the information has it's own place to be instead of mentioning it multiple times in the other sections. I also think that there are a lot of interesting bits about the artifacts that were found at the site that could get their own section. I love that the cultural identity and practices of the people at the site was mentioned because that's such an important part of understanding a site and it's significance! Lastly, and I also assume this was planned to be done, I think it would strengthen the comprehension of the article if you hyperlinked some of the stuff you're talking about (like the dvaravati or the Khmer empire) so that people who are reading the article have easy access to the additional information they may want or need to fully understand the article. :)