User:Mminerp3/Mueang Fa Daet Song Yang, Thailand/Pengwyn00 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mminerp3, Lilianavanzutphen


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mminerp3/Mueang_Fa_Daet_Song_Yang%2C_Thailand?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mueang Fa Daet Song Yang, Thailand

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

I'm unsure of whether the first paragraphs of your article without a header are meant to be a part of the article so I'm basing this section not on those but on the next part which seems like a better lead. The lead that you have is really good, and provides a good brief description of the site. However, I think you could add more to introduce what's going to be talked about later in the article. For example, a mention of mortuary practices from the site since that has its own subsection.

Content

All of your content within the article seems appropriate and up to date, judging from the sources.

Tone and Balance

You seem to have a neutral tone when talking about the site, and the content all seems to be coming from a neutral point of view.

Sources and References

From what I can see, your sources seem good. There's a range of publication dates, and the information in them seems up to date. However, it looks like you haven't gone through and added any of the footnotes for your sources within the article yet. This is important to make sure you implement these before publishing your article, as it's the correct way to cite information and makes it easier to confirm that all your claims come from proper sources.

Organization

I think overall the organization of your article is good, however I think that you could move the contact and influences section to be earlier in the article as the information about contact and how that causes changes in their cultural practices and architecture would be relevant for those sections.

Overall Impressions

You guys did a good job!

Additional Questions

I'm a bit confused about the first paragraphs in your article. Are they part of the article or are they going to be cut? The section labeled with the name of the site reads like a proper lead so I was confused.