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Article Evaluation (Paul Sepuya)
Ways to improve article page: (STRIKETHROUGH TEXT WHEN COMPLETED, SIGN & DATE)

1. Include picture of artist

2. "Critical Reception" section to highlight commentary, critiques, and awards that given to or are about the artist's work. (COMPLETED, 2/6/18)

3. Incorporating the use of social media by the artist

4. List work that has been displayed in institutions

5. Add more to the "Style" section on the article's page

6. Add artist's social media accounts in "External Links" (COMPLETED, 1/24/18)

Article Discussion (Paul Sepuya)
1. Is everything in the article relevant to the article topic? Is there anything that distracted you? ''At the end of the Introduction paragraph, the last two ending sentences regarding critical reception/review/comments was a bit off topic or distracting. I think those sentences can be moved to another section.''

2. Is the article neutral? Are there any claims, or frames, that appear heavily biased toward a particular position? ''Article seems to be neutral. There are certain sentences/phrases that appear to be toward a particular position. The use of "yearning" and "feelings of longing" needs to be cited as whether this was the intent made by the artist about his work.''

3. Are there viewpoints that are over-represented, or underrepresented? ''The "Style" section is underdeveloped. More research on this particular artist's style is needed.''

4. Check a few citations. Do the links work? Does the source support the claims in the article? ''One of the links does not work and gives an "Expired" message (citation number 8). One of the citations (number 4), can be hyperlinked to the online article but is not.''

5. Is each fact referenced with an appropriate, reliable reference? Where does the information come from? Are these neutral sources? If biased, is that bias noted? A chunk of the references either come from institutions such as UCLA Art, Yancey Richardson Gallery, and MoMA or from news articles like The Nation and CULT.

6. Is any information out of date? Is anything missing that could be added? ''Nothing is really out of date as the majority of references are present day references. The Wikipage is of a living persons so the dates should be fairly recent.''

7. Check out the Talk page of the article. What kinds of conversations, if any, are going on behind the scenes about how to represent this topic? ''I noticed that every user on the talk page was past CSUEB students in this course. They did a great job at putting together this article and including an evaluation.''

8. How is the article rated? Is it a part of any WikiProjects? ''There is currently no rating on the article's quality scale. The article is a part of Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment. Unfortunately, it was nominated for deletion in October 2017.''

9. How does the way Wikipedia discusses this topic differ from the way we've talked about it in class?

10. Ideas to improve Paul Sepuya's Wiki page? ''Adding a picture of the artist would be useful. Also, creating a "Critical Reception" section could be useful in adding commentary, critiques, or awards given to the artist. Additionally, showing a timeline of works either currently being produced or already finished.''

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Paul Mpagi Sepuya (born 1982) is an American photographer and artist. His photographs focus heavily on the relationship between artist and subject. He often explores the nude in relation to intimacy of studio photography. The foundation of Sepuya's work is portraiture. He features friends and muses in his work that creates meaningful relationships through the medium of photography. Sepuya reveals the subjects in his art in fragments. Fragmentation is characterized to viewers as parts of the body such as torsos, arms, legs, or feet in a photograph rather than featuring the entire body. Through provocative photography, Sepuya creates a feeling of longing and wanting more. This yearning desire allows viewers to connect deeply with the photography in a meaningful way.

THIS SHOULD BE TAKEN OUT AND PUT INTO ANOTHER SECTION BUT KEEPING FOR REFERENCE: Curator and critic Hilton Als associated Sepuya philosophically and spiritually as one of writer James Baldwin's "living children." Critic Barry Schwabsky describes Sepuya as "a must have artist of the moment."

Entire Article Paste (Paul Sepuya)
Paul Mpagi Sepuya (born 1982) is an American photographer and artist. His photographs focus heavily on the relationship between artist and subject. He often explores the nude in relation to the intimacy of studio photography. The foundation of Sepuya's work is portraiture. He features friends and muses in his work that creates meaningful relationships through the medium of photography. Sepuya reveals the subjects in his art in fragments. Fragmentation is characterized to viewers as parts of the body such as torsos, arms, legs, or feet in a photograph rather than featuring the entire body. Through provocative photography, Sepuya creates a feeling of longing and wanting more. This yearning desire allows viewers to connect deeply with the photography in a meaningful way.

Early life and education
Sepuya was born in San Bernardino, California. He received a Bachelor in Fine Arts in Photography & Imaging from New York University's Tisch School of the Arts in 2004 and subsequently a Master of Fine Arts in Photography from UCLA Department of Art in 2016. Work from his master's degree was presented at the UCLA MFA Exhibition #3.

Style
Sepuya is best known for his portraiture. Portraiture is the artist's representation of a person. The artist uses elements of art such as composition, line, or color to display the personality or mood of a person. Another major feature of his work is fragmentation. Viewers are able to see parts of the body in Sepuya's portraits. Through this, he is able to create an intimate feeling of yearning for more. It is this yearning that allows viewers to connect deeply with his art.

Career
Sepuya's series Studio Work (2010–11) continues the development of his sustained interest in portraiture and the intimacy developed between the sitter and the photographer in the controlled environment of the studio. The range and breadth of his work examines not only the personality and character of the portrait but the private performance that exists within the photographic studio. “My studio was private, but not a closed environment. Rather, it was a stage that I inhabited and opened to those around me,” he says in reflecting on the production of the studio environment and those invited to have their portraits made. He draws inspiration for his contemporary investigations of studio photography from the works of Robert Mapplethorpe and art historian and critic Brian O'Doherty whose publication "Studio and Cube:On the relationship between where art is made and where art is displayed" both feature prominently in his early work. He has held a residency at the Studio Museum in Harlem and his work is included in the Leslie-Lohman Museum of Gay and Lesbian Art.

In addition he has published several artists books and editions with Printed Matter, Inc and has maintained a professional relationship with its former executive director (2004-2010) AA Bronson. Since 2004, Sepuya has shot editorial features for I.D. (magazine), Kaiserin Magazine, and BUTT Magazine. His evolving collection of the self-published periodical 'SHOOT' has been sold internationally since its inception in 2005. Sepuya's 2010 publication, "The Accidental Egyptian and Occidental Arrangements," co-created with artist Timothy Hull, was financed through crowdfunding.

Sepuya is represented by Document, Chicago; Yancey Richardson Gallery, New York; Stevenson Gallery, Cape Town. His work is featured in various exhibitions such as the Museum of Contemporary Art, Los Angeles, The Studio Museum in Harlem, Franklin Art Works, Minneapolis, and the Artist Institute in New York.

Predominantly NY-based through 2014, he is currently visiting faculty at CalArts, School of Art, Program in Photography and Media.

Four of his photos are in the collection of MoMA.

Critical Reception

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Sepuya's work is critically acclaimed by art critics and enthusiasts. His work is distinctive in a sense that critics acknowledge his effective use of body fragmentation portraiture techniques.

A contributor writer from The Brooklyn Rail, explains how one of Sepia's exhibits called the Mirror Study (2016), "has lingered with him the most" in that "the photographer captures himself photographing a cut-up portrait of a man taped to a mirror, hiding the camera and all but his arms behind what remains of the printed image (only the man’s arm)".

An art critic from the May 2017, Fine Arts section issue of The Nation states that Sepuya's photographs are "as insistently reflective and formally refined as any being made today, can nonetheless proclaim that in his work, the sum total of content lies outside of the conversation about art". Sepuya "almost too perfectly encapsulates the current tendency to see photography as a game of mirrors. Its conceptually self-questioning strategies and fastidious-almost-to-the-point-of-finicky aesthetics account, in part, for why he seems to be a must-have artist of the moment", the art critic exclaims when mentioning Sepuya's proven track record.

Article Evaluation (San Francisco Department of Public Health)
Ways to improve article page: (STRIKETHROUGH TEXT WHEN COMPLETED, SIGN & DATE)

1. Include department emblem picture 2. Include differentiating departments within SFDPH 3. Brief overview of the impact of Mark Zuckerberg on the department and other subdivisions 4. Better the introduction paragraph and add more information to it 5. Look for physical textbook related books at the library 6. Research peer-review articles about the department (possible impacts during the AIDS epidemic for surrounding communities)

Bibliography List

- Historical impact of China Town plague in relation to SFPDH textbook

- HIV and AIDS annual Report Archive

- Community Health Equity and Promotion (CHEP) Branch

- Bridge HIV Cooperation with SFDPH

- San Francisco Public Library Digital Archives

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Entire Article Paste (San Francisco Department of Public Health)
The San Francisco Department of Public Health (SFDPH), previously referred to as San Francisco Health Department, is composed of various subdivisions that work together to serve the city of San Francisco.

Mission
San Francisco Department of Public Health's mission is to protect and promote the health of all San Francisco citizens. The SFDPH works to achieve this via its two main divisions: the San Francisco Health Network and Population Health.

History
In 1899, there was a Bubonic Plaugue outbreak in San Francisco's Chinatown, San Francisco plague of 1900–1904. During this time, it was discovered that there had been cases of the plague in Hong Kong, China. Chinese people that would be entering the U.S. were forbidden and fear affected citizens of San Francisco. The San Francisco Health Department closed Chinese businesses and subsequently burned parts of Chinatown. The inhabitants of Chinatown were required to receive vaccinations if they planned on emigrating from the city. A citizen Wong Wai sued the department; the ruling was in favor of Wai and requested that the department terminate their behavior. Health officials dissatisfied with the ruling ostracized and isolated Chinatown and all its inhabitants, because of their suspicions of the plague spreading.

It was after the plague scare that raised awareness for public health intervention. San Francisco's health officials, who consisted of San Francisco Mayor Eugene Schmitz, California Governor George Pardee, and his personal health officials, created a partnership between themselves and the sanitary campaign in Chinatown. Through this partnership, health boards all around the state would be notified if the the causes of death were suspicious or had suspicion of the plague. This was in efforts to address and better serve the public's interests in health and sanitation during the time of the plague. In addition, any obtained tissues from suspicious causes of death would directly be sent to the Public Health Service Laboratory in San Francisco to help identify and eradicate the infection.

Population Health Division
Population Health Division(PHD) covers a broad spectrum of topics.

San Francisco Health Network
The San Francisco Health Network consists of Zuckerberg San Francisco General Hospital, Laguna Honda Hospital and many other clinics throughout San Francisco. The network has vocalized their non-discriminatory approach and mission to serve all who are in need of health services. The San Francisco Health Network has stated they will serve irrespective of immigration status or the lack of health insurance. The network aims to implement and increase innovative strategies.

Zuckerberg San Francisco General Hospital
ZSFGH is the only level one trauma center in San Francisco.