User:Mnbkv6/Astronomer Royal/ChrisitanLowes Peer Review

General info
Mnbkv6
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Mnbkv6/Astronomer Royal
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Astronomer Royal

Evaluate the drafted changes
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Impressions:
The layout of the edit is much easier to read, and doesn't bounce between multiple thoughts.

Lead:
The introduction[edit] lacks much of a description of what the Astronomer Royal does and why it's important, I feel it needs this to be a better overview of the topic.

Content:
I would like to see added descriptions of their discoveries, and the work that was done. Rather than just a rewrite/organization of the article.

Tone:
The tone seems consistent, and neutral.

Sources:
-Through the Introduction and History Edit, I don't see any citations. The main article appears to have some sprinkled throughout. I'd recommend adding them to your edit/ improving the cited sources throughout.

Organization:
-Introduction: The second paragraph of this section seems more like a introduction to the history, rather than an description of the topic. Could be improved by shortening into same paragraph/moving location.

-Potential New sections: Potentially add new sections about the "discoveries made by the Astronomer Royal",

-History: Creating a sub section for the changes in role/responsibilities of the position