User:Mnismb/Hitting mechanics/Reese2022 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mnismb


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mnismb/Hitting_mechanics?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hitting mechanics

Evaluate the drafted changes
Starting off the first thing I noticed was all of your information is combined into one section, hitting phases. The first paragraph you have would make a great lead, I suggest splitting the information you have written into a couple different sections. Keep your first paragraph for the lead and then do a separate section for each phase of a baseball swing. The information for each phase is short and I feel like you could add more information to each section about each phase of the swing, this will make your article much longer and help give readers a better understanding of what all goes into swinging a baseball bat. The only information you have posted is about hitting phases, I'm not sure if you have more information somewhere else but if you don't I suggest adding in sections about hitting analysis and a biomechanic description of hitting like in the original article. Overall I think the information you have in your article is great, just a little hard to understand for people who might not be as knowledgable in baseball because of the way it is organized and sectioned off.