User:Mo791/Jennifer Wortman Vaughan/Junubiin2011 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Team 5: Jennifer Wortman Vaughan


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mo791/Jennifer Wortman Vaughan - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Jennifer Wortman Vaughan - Wikipedia
 * Jennifer Wortman Vaughan - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi Team 5,

Here is my peer review for you!

Lead


 * This is a new page that was created so there was no prior "lead." However, the lead is brief, concise, and informative. It shares who the audience will be reading about and why they should "care".

Content


 * The content is useful because it shares the journey of Wortmann's career and their achievements. It only contains information that the reader needs to gain an insight into Vaughn's career and work.

Tone and Balance


 * There is nothing much I would add to the academic section. However, I think, if possible, you should add some personal information about Vaughn to help strike the balance between purely academic information and something that allows the reader to know a little bit about Vaughns story. Especially since they've had an impact on the CS (Computer Science) and tech space as a woman.

Sources and References


 * The sources are reliable and all working when you click on them.

Organization


 * This page is well formatted and easy to follow along as it is separated two distinct categories of their roles/experience and career path, and into the specific academic accomplishments which is where Vaughn gains their credibility as an academic.

Images

Overall impressions
 * There are no images, but it would be helpful to add one! It might not be possible to obtain one "legally" so have a look on the creative commons for any images that might work. If not a picture of Vaughn, I think an image of some of her work in AI (Artificial Intelligence) or CS.
 * I really like this page so far! It doesn't "overdo" it with citations from many different types of academic journals as well as articles from credible sources such as Harvard University, UPenn (University of Pennsylvania) and Microsoft. You are really on a strong track to have a great Wikipedia page that you, and more importantly Vaughn can be proud of.

~Deng