User:MoBMila/African Americans in France/Tanneleo023 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

https://dashboard.wikiedu.org/users/MoBMila

MoBMila


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * African Americans in France
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * African Americans in France

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * Everything in the article mostly seems relevant to the topic. It was very interesting to see you connect the Wikipedia article in which you are referencing Kanye West' and Jay Z's song. The history of African Americans from the colonial Era, up to the 60's really helped with driving the topic home.
 * The article seems to be neutral. I don't see many imbalances in any position. The history that you mention to back your Wikipedia article is general enough that there wouldn't be a divide in opinions. The article also flows really well and is very easy to read.
 * I think the history segment is represented a perfect amount in your Wikipedia article. One improvement that could be beneficial to your article is possibly expanding on Tyler Stovall's "interpretation." Rather than leaving it with just his quote, might be beneficial to add a few sentences of analysis right below it.
 * All the links seem to work perfect. It's very nice to see that you added both citations, and actual link to other Wikipedia pages on certain words. Obviously, over doing it and doing word for word can be too much, but overall, having an adequate amount of links can really help the reader get a better understanding of the article. Good job!
 * The evidence you present in your history section regarding Migration seems fairly accurate and un-biased. However, I noticed there was a lot of footnotes regarding a lack of "citations." The citations you have so far are good, so it can't hurt to add, or even re-use the citations that were cited previously. Some of your articles seem to come from mainstream sources like CNN, Newsletter, and NPR. There also seem to be some independent sources like Global and Mail.
 * The information seems to be mostly from existing date sources. One last thing that may be beneficial to your article is possibly expanding on your 50's history. The section where you talk about the 50's and 60's are pretty 60's heavy and there are always good information during the 50's which can bolster your evidence.