User:Moaazlafi/Hilal Khan Ghazi Mosque/FaridaElsefary Peer Review

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Moaaz
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Moaazlafi/Hilal Khan Ghazi Mosque
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Lead is concise, straight to the point and explains what the article will be about, without sharing too much or too little. Its clarity makes it easy for readers to decide whether or not it is an article that interests them. The information in the lead is also not repetitive with the remainder of the article.

Content

The content is relevant and coherent. The author is able to provide details when necessary, and be brief when necessary. They also did not shy away from going into details regarding the different parts of the monument (the prayer hall, entrance, etc.) which gave us readers a thorough picture of the monument and an understanding of the different elements that it is comprised of. Overall, it was an informative piece to read.

Tone and Balance

I did not pick up on a bias from the article. The article was clear and leaning towards descriptive. The author striked a balance of tone whereby it is neither academic and formal in a sense that makes it difficult to comprehend, and still is not informal in a sense that compromises its quality.

Sources and References

Sources are properly cited, and the hyperlinks provided are functional. Could benefit from adding more hyperlinks to key terms/ideas/figures.

Organization

The author writes well, and has a good command of language such that we are able to grasp the information shared while enjoying the read. One comment is that some paragraphs are quite long, and could be better received if broken down into smaller paragraphs.No noticeable spelling or grammatical errors.

Images and Media

Good choice and placement of images throughout.

Overall Impressions

This article was enjoyable and showed how well-read the author is. It is a quality article that is a useful resource for researchers on the Mosque at large. It has improved the quality and inserted details to the content that further enrich the information being received by reading this article. It could be improved by editing the paragraphs to become shorter, and possibly adding more subheadings where needed. Also, diversifying the sources used would benefit the insights provided in the article.