User:Moaazlafi/Hilal Khan Ghazi Mosque/Nehal al-Shamy Peer Review

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Moaz Lafi
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Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

The lead is successful in giving an overview of the building without providing exhaustive information about all of its aspects, which will be discussed later in the article. It pointed out to the main points of its history and location and highlighted the significance of the mosque making it compelling to the reader.

Content:

The article covers the three expected aspects of the building including location, patron, and architecture. The section on "construction", though, might be renamed as plan since it does not mention specific information about the material or technique or history of its construction. In this regard, you might want to consider adding those subheadings (if available).

On the other hand, the article has some repetitions in the information and the use of words, which may affect the readability. For example, the information about the mosque's location right after the lead has mentioned it might benefit from restructuring. Also, you mentioned many other monuments in the city, which is plausible. However, you might mention them briefly all in one sentence highlighting that they convey the significance of the city (as you mentioned later in the last sentence of that paragraph). The word "entrance" was also repeated several times, where it can be omitted or replaced by another word like "gateway".

Also, this sentence " The prayer portico is separated from the courtyard by the three arches of the Pishtaq and two large widows in the other two side sections of the portico, but the window of the zenana is decorated by Jali screen to protect the women inside it" was not very clear to me. I suppose you mean the façade not the pishtaq in this sentence, since a pishtaq is a single projecting arch. Therefore, you may want to clarify it a bit more.

Tone and Balance:

The tone was neutral and academic, conforming with the Wikipedia requirements.

Sources and References:

The sources used are mostly reliable and academic, varying between academic books, journal articles and websites.

Organization:

The article is well-organized in a logical order which makes it readable. It also satisfies the main elements one would expect from an encyclopedic entry about a monument.

Images and Media:

Images are chosen well. Furthermore, there is a separate section for Gallery.

Overall Impression:

The article is generally successful in covering the main aspects of the building in a neutral tone and using trusted sources.