User:Mobamba 1098/Resistance (ecology)/Hw9724wx Peer Review

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Mobamba1098
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 * User:Mobamba 1098/Resistance (ecology)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Resistance (ecology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
The new lead section, specifically the first sentence is much better than the original article. It flows easier and is more comprehendible, nice job.

In the article body, when you say "to little mammalian herbivores" are you referring to physically small animals or a little amount of mammalian herbivores? If its the amount I think it would help to add the word "amount" or something structured similarly. Alternatively, if you're talking about physically small maybe say something like "smaller mammalian herbivores". Also, I like that you added a little humor by saying "creepy crawly herbivores", and maybe it would help to follow up with an example "[...] crawly herbivores such as ____". The following sentence is a little confusing, "Admixing broadleaves to conifers moreover increments[...]" maybe consider just changing the wording a little bit in, specifically "moreover increments". Other than those couple wording things, I think the article body is much improved from the original! There is more structure and it is much easier to read (:

Regarding references, I noticed that there was only one citation. Make sure to include the citations of the original article from the parts that you kept, like the one about Hurricane Joan and the Jamaican forest -- or if you can find more up to date sources that include that information since the ones from the original are all from the 80's-early 2000s. Also include where you paraphrased the lead body information from, even if it is from the same source as your [1] just for clarification.

Overall great job and I think the article is much improved from where you found it!