User:ModernViolet/The American Woman's Home/Meliboxeo Peer Review

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I am reviewing the Sandbox Entry on The American Woman's Home by ModernViolet.
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I really loved the introduction the article gives about Catherine Beecher and believe that it is very useful context for the section regarding the book and that it is very well written. However, since the lead states that the book was co-authored by Catherine Beecher and Harriet Beecher, I think it is important to also have a section about Harriet Beecher. Furthermore, because there are two Beecher sisters, I think it is really important to be clear about which sister you are talking about. As the reader, I was not always able to determine which sister the wikipedia article is talking about when the lines just denote the speaker as being "Beecher."

I also really loved that the authors incorporated a lot of hyper-links in the lead section, and it would be great if more could be added throughout the article.

Throughout the article, there are some grammatical issues (commas) and issues with plurals. I am also not sure that some sentences are grammatically correct: for example, "She advocated for the role women assumed as homemakers, tending to the family and the home itself, to be treated as a science." or " She argued in order for women to properly assume their role as homemakers, they must receive higher education." I would also take an additional look at sentences that use ";" because a ; must always be followed by another complete sentence. However, these are quick and easy fixes that I am confident the authors will be able to fix before the final draft.

Regarding the tone of the article, I think that the authors did an amazing job maintaining a neutral tone throughout the article and using accesible language. I was also impressed by the multiple strong scholarly sources that the authors used.

Another small comment I would like to make is about images. I do not know if there are any images available on this topic that meet Wikipedia's guidelines, but, if there are, I think their inclusion would make this great piece even stronger. Some suggestions about images include pictures of the Beecher sisters, pictures of the cover of "The American Women's Home," or even image excerpts from within the book.

Finally, in regard to the article's structure, I think the authors chose a really strong method for organizing the article. I definitely think it makes sense to begin with historical context and background on the authors before diving into the book itself.