User:Mohrra3748/Onchocerciasis/Brownwahlee Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SchmeiserAaron, ClaireMB22, Mohrra3748


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mohrra3748/Onchocerciasis - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Onchocerciasis - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
It is a little confusing, as in the original article it mentions that onchocerciasis was eliminated in Columbia in July 2013, and in your draft, you have in April 2013. The original article does say it was announced by the Pan American Health Organization (PAHO) and yours is coming from the World Health Organization. I think it can be a little confusing, but one is verification and the other an announcement, and two different organizations. This bit may be something to change if you add it, or maybe something to update on the original article. Also, the section on the elimination of onchocerciasis is in the original article in the prevention and elimination section; Ecuador, Guatemala, and Mexico are mentioned in this section after Columbia. The original article mentions elimination in Mexico in the epidemiology section as well. If you are looking for information, then it may be a good start to find ideas, but to add that may be repeating information that is already there.

The section you have on prevention is very similar to what is in the lead of the original article.

Due the part written on elimination of onchocerciasis being in the original article already, perhaps continuing to focus on disease outcome can be a good addition to the article. I think continuing to add to the affect the disease is a good addition.

It's a good start, the tone seems to be informative. I think keeping the informative tone as the article addition is continued would be good. It is easy to read and follow so far.