User:Molleighroy/Goose/Meganespires Peer Review

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Molleighroy/Goose?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template

Draft needs to have more sources to support the facts being stated. I advise hyperlinking words such as "migration" to the existing wikipedia article on migration. Linking to other articles within wikipedia is important to ensuring that all things that some people may not know could be discovered within one click.

Double check your grammar and try to make the sentences flow a little better. I know it's just the draft right now, but really try hard to take out filler words such as "that" or "very". Doing this will improve the writing and make the article easier for people to read as they will only be reading words that are absolutely necessary (I also have a bad habit of this).

It also might be a good idea to switch the formation and navigation,I just feel like this makes more sense to me, but I could be wrong.

Also, looking at the article, I see that some of your information in your sandbox is repeating what the article has already said. For example, young geese being called goslings.

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