User:Mollyanders/Hard seltzer/Iander2 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mollyanders


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mollyanders/Hard seltzer
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Hard seltzer
 * Hard seltzer

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, Molly! First of all, love the last name. Second of all (and probably more importantly), I love the edits and additions you've made to this article! Here is a few things I noticed:


 * 1) I saw that you switched out the photo that was being used on the original version of the article and I like it! I do wonder if you're able to make the picture any bigger or include other pictures that show the cans closer up.
 * 2) In the "History" section, you begin to talk about the components of hard seltzer, calorie count, carbs and etc. It might be beneficial if you can make this into it's own section because it strays away a bit from the larger topic of the history of hard seltzer. It could be titled, "Components", "Content", "Nutritional information" and so on.
 * 3) The "Fermentation Process" section seems a bit bare now (and it's possible that you're still adding to it of course) but I went to the Guinness Storehouse museum in Ireland this summer and they had tons of details about fermentation and the whole rest of the process that you could add. Of course, beer and hard seltzer are different but perhaps their website or other websites can give you good examples of how they write about it. The other option is to simply book a flight to Ireland, purchase a ticket for the tour and take notes -- seems easy enough!

Overall, the article is looking great! Let me know if you want more help :)

Warmly,

Isabel