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Dr. Council's comments on combined lead section
Since you have already put your lead at the head of the article, I'll comment here: J.R. Council (talk) 21:27, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
 * Overall, nice job! Just a few comments on your lead here
 * 1) Regents is capitalized
 * 2) "New, refreshing light" is a value judgment. Wikipedia coverage is neutral.
 * 3) Halfway through, you start using her first name. Don't do this!
 * 4) Be specific, but brief in the lead, about what kinds of controversy she has been involved with.
 * Add links to related topics mentioned in the lead, like social psychology.
 * It's good to see you're breaking your article into its main parts. Adding section and subsection titles organizes and makes it easy for the reader to follow.

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 8
Also, although you've provided a couple of links to other articles, please link more terms in the lead. I have some other comments, but I'll put them in the text of the article where they apply: J.R. Council (talk) 04:03, 27 November 2018 (UTC) J.R. Council (talk) 20:54, 27 November 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) I can see that you've taken some, but not all of my advice on improving your combined lead. Please be specific about the controversies. What exactly did she do that excited controversy?
 * 1) Since no one has signed off, I can't assign credit. Please indicate who worked on this and what they did.

Dr. Council's comments on final draft for Assignment 9

 * As far as content is concerned, this seems pretty final to me, except for the last section on Controversy, which trails off inconclusively. Since this is the last section with any real text, you need to have a more complete and definite ending. Better yet, Discuss her Legacy in prose, not list form.
 * The main problem is that there are no reference citations. I know you can do them, because you've done it for earlier assignments.
 * "public funds in scientific research." [4]" is not a proper Wikipedia citation, but it's all I could find that even looked like a citation.
 * These are easy fixes. When you take care of them, I'll send this on to Ian for final approval. J.R. Council (talk) 05:51, 30 November 2018 (UTC)

Article
Ellen S. Berscheid born (1936) is an American social psychologist who is currently a Regents professor at the University of Minnesota, where she earlier had earned her PhD in 1965. Berscheid conducted research on interpersonal relationships, emotions and moods, and social cognition. Berscheid wrote books, articles and other publications to contribute to the field of Social Psychology. She was involved in controversy surrounding the funding for her research on why people fall in love. Berscheid has not only held a position at the University of Minnesota as a Psychology and Business professor; she has also held a position at Pillsbury. She has been presented with many different awards in honor of her contributions to social psychology including: The Presidential Citation and the Distinguished Scientific Contribution Award from the American Psychological Association. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 01:05, 30 November 2018 (UTC) Molson27 (talk) 01:06, 30 November 2018 (UTC)Olivia.schwartz (talk) 01:07, 30 November 2018 (UTC)

Career
Berscheid started her academic career as an Education major at Beloit College in Wisconsin, before transferring to University of Nevada, Reno. At the University of Nevada, Berscheid was given a research assistant grant by her professor, Paul Secord. This assistantship led Berscheid to pick up psychology as her second major, in which she graduated with honors. After graduation Berscheid applied for and received PHS Predoctoral Research Fellowship, at the University of Minnesota to work with Harold Kelley. However, Berscheid decided to decline the offer and became a research administrator for Pillsbury. Berscheid later applied for a research assistantship at the University of Minnesota, working with Elliot Aronson. Under the direction of Elliot Aronson she obtained her PhD in social psychology.

Berscheid accepted a job teaching research methods in the business department at the University of Minnesota. Through the business department, Berscheid met Elaine (Walster) Hatfield. Hatfield convinced Berscheid to join her in researching equity and attraction. At the time, women conducting research was rare and may have been stopped if too many people had taken notice, therefore Hatfield and Berscheid conducted their research quietly through a federal grant. Berscheid's main research interest was interpersonal relationships. Ellen Berscheid looked at why people fall in love, the meaning of love, and attraction in close relationships.

Molson27 (talk) 01:06, 30 November 2018 (UTC)Olivia.schwartz (talk) 01:07, 30 November 2018 (UTC)

Controversy
In 1974, Berscheid was the center of a controversy regarding federal funding of research. Berscheid received funding of $84,000 to research why people fall in love. Senator William Proxmire of Wisconsin used Bersceid in order to focus media attention on projects Proximire viewed as self-serving and wasteful of taxpayer dollar. This led to the scandal that "called into question use of public funds in scientific research." Through this controversy, it was demonstrated that people really do want to learn about love.

A few years later, Hatfield left the business department and Berscheid took over Hatfield's job as Student Activities Bureau. Due to an all male faculty, Berscheid expected an early retirement but then was offered a professorship in the psychology department. Berscheid still remains on the Psychology Faculty at the University of Minnesota. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 01:01, 30 November 2018 (UTC)

Significant Publications
Books: Journal Articles''': Other Publications:
 * Berscheid, E., & Regan, P. (2005). The psychology of interpersonal relationships. New York: Prentice-Hall.
 * Berscheid, E. (2006). Notes on the social psychological study of love. Impulse, 60, 5-13.
 * Berscheid, E. (1999). The greening of relationship science. American Psychologist, 54, 260-266.
 * Reis, H. T., Collins, W. A., & Berscheid, E. (2000). The relationship context of human behavior and development. Psychological Bulletin, 126, 844-872.
 * Berscheid, E. (2006). Searching for the meaning of "love." In R. J. Sternberg & K. Weis (Eds.), The psychology of love (2nd ed., pp. 171-183). New Haven,CT: Yale University Press.
 * Berscheid, E. (1994). Interpersonal relationships. In L. W. Porter & M. R. Rosenzweig (Eds.), Annual review of psychology (pp. 79-129). Palo Alto, CA: Annual Reviews.
 * Berscheid, E., & Reis, H. T. (1998). Attraction and close relationships. In D. T. Gilbert, S. T. Fiske, & G. Lindzey (Eds.), The handbook of social psychology (4th ed., pp. 193-281). New York: McGraw-Hill. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 01:07, 30 November 2018 (UTC)

Legacy
Ellen Berscheid has been presented with many different awards in honor of her contributions to social psychology. Some of Berscheid's notable awards include the Presidential Citation and Distinguished Scientific Contribution Award presented by the American Psychological Association, Distinguished Scientist Award from the Society of Experimental Social Psychology, and the Distinguished Career Award by International Society for the Study of Personal Relationships. Ellen Berscheid also has held presidency of the International Society for the Study of Interpersonal Relationships (1991-1992) and the Society of Personality and Social Psychology (1983-1985).

kaitmorgan142 (talk) 01:05, 30 November 2018 (UTC) Molson27 (talk) 01:06, 30 November 2018 (UTC)Olivia.schwartz (talk) 01:07, 30 November 2018 (UTC)


 * I made a few minor deletions of material I did not think was pertininet. Sending link to user:Ian (Wiki Ed)J.R. Council (talk) 23:58, 2 December 2018 (UTC)

Lead Section
Ellen S. Berscheid born(1936) is an American social psychologist whom is currently a regents professor at the University of Minnesota, where she earlier had earned her PhD in 1965. She has influenced much research within the topics of interpersonal relationships, emotions and moods, social cognition and more. Her contributions to social psychology include her books, journals, as well as other forms of publications. She has had some forms of controversy present themselves throughout her career, but has overcome the barriers to influence social psychology in a new, refreshing light. Ellen has not only held a position at the University of Minnesota as a Psychology professor; she has also grown through past work experiences. Ellen had once possessed a position at Pillsbury company, but soon left in hopes to further pursue her psychology interests as an assistant at the University of Minnesota. She has been presented with many different awards in honor of her contributions to social psychology including: The Presidential Citation and the Distinguished Scientific Contribution Award from the American Psychological Association. Ellen continues to spread her knowledge lecturing at the University of Minnesota. Molson27 (talk) 00:42, 8 November 2018 (UTC) Olivia.schwartz (talk) 00:42, 8 November 2018 (UTC) kaitmorgan142 (talk) 00:43, 8 November 2018 (UTC)

Please note I have changed links so that clicking the Sandbox icon on Morgan's user page goes directly to this sandbox. Same for the "point person" link in the Blackboard menu. J.R. Council (talk) 05:16, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

I think the main problem with our article is the lack of detail and clarity throughout. Most of the sections in the article are short and not detailed enough, which leave the reader jumping from one area of discussion to another and it is hard to follow.

One reference I found was Interpersonal Relationships by Ellen Berscheid. This was an annual review wrote in 1994 discussing her topic of research: Interpersonal Relationships. The second source I found was a journal by Sarah Meyers and Ellen Berscheid called The Language of Love: The Difference a Preposition Makes. Both of these sources elaborate on the research Ellen Berscheid did, and the contributions she made to relationship and love research.

One question I have is do we need to include the external links section, and if so what should we put in or add to this section? My second question is if we add a section about interpersonal relationships is this too broad? She studied interpersonal relationships and love and it is one of her main contributions. However I am not sure what section of the article this topic would fit best under? Molson27 (talk) 16:59, 3 October 2018 (UTC)
 * If there is an external links section in the current article, leave it. If there are other relevant external sources, you can add them in. Otherwise you can just leave it as is, as long as the external links are appropriate.
 * Adding a section on interpersonal relationships (in general) would distract from your main topic. However, you could have a section on how Berscheid's work contributed to understanding interpersonal relationships. J.R. Council (talk) 05:23, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

I think the main problem with this article is the lack of resources. There were only 2 sources included (with four sub-sources), which makes me kind of doubt the credibility that this article may have. I think that if this article had a diversity of many sources, that would give this article a lot more power.

One source that I found was a journal article called the Emergence of Relationship Science by Ellen Berscheid and Elaine Hatfield. The second source I found was from the University of Minnesota website. It goes over her research interests, publications and narrative. https://apps.cla.umn.edu/directory/profiles/bersc001

One question that I do have is if it would be a good idea to dive deeper into her and Elaine Hatfield doing research together, and how it was a different thing because they were two women doing research together on relationships? --Kait Morgan (Vegs142) kaitmorgan142 (talk) 00:18, 11 October 2018 (UTC)
 * You could certainly add a section on this. It should just be a summary, not an extensive discussion
 * The assignment called for 2 questions. Ask me another for full credit. J.R. Council (talk) 05:32, 12 October 2018 (UTC)

I believe that the huge issue with this article is that, the way it stands, is so incomplete. The article does not justify the hard work and accomplishments of Ellen S. Berscheid as it should. There are so many things that could be implemented to make this article more reliable, as well as relatable. Each section should be more elaborate and detailed, while also implementing more contents than what are currently displayed. Olivia.schwartz (talk) 03:42, 4 October 2018 (UTC)

The sources that I have found could be very beneficial to bettering the entirety of the article. They possess characteristics that give a good look into the outstanding work done by Ellen. The first source was found in the Journal of Personality, titled 'Stereotyping and the generality of implicit personality theory'. This is an entry submitted by Ellen S. Berscheid and Paul F. Secord. The second source that I have found comes from the Annual Review of Psychology, titled 'Love in the Fourth Dimension'. This was written by and is the work of Ellen S. Berscheid. Olivia.schwartz (talk) 03:42, 4 October 2018 (UTC)

A question that I wonder is how many contents become too many and do the length of each content matter as long as it is well written and inserts an amount of information that creates strong validity to the content topic? Olivia.schwartz (talk) 03:42, 4 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Wikipedia articles should be succinct. If there is a lot of relevant content, then a section can be longer, but still be succinct. Avoid wordiness and flowery language.
 * The assignment called for 2 questions. Ask me another for full credit.

Dr. Council's comments:
All: I think Olivia's lead would make the best starting point for the combined lead in Assignment 7. Start with her name in bold, then her notable research and findings. You can end by briefly sketching out her career and awards.
 * Morgan -- don't try to tell a story in the lead. This is too much a narrative of her career. Some of this will be okay for the main article. For the lead, establish her notability right up front. This would be her research and major findings. Then briefly sketch out her professional career and honors. J.R. Council (talk) 20:48, 31 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Kait -- this is more succinct, but don't go in chronological order. Use the first couple of sentences to make readers want to know more about her. J.R. Council (talk) 20:51, 31 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Olivia -- this is good, but be specific. Rather than "many different awards" say "awards including...[specific names]."
 * Be sure to proofread. J.R. Council (talk) 20:56, 31 October 2018 (UTC)

Lead Section- Morgan Olson
Ellen S. Berscheid is a social psychologist from Colfax, Wisconsin. Berscheid attended the University of Minnesota, where she received her Ph.D in Psychology. However, her path to receive this degree was fairly complex. Berscheid transfered to the University of Minnesota in her undergrad and it was here that she added psychology as her second major. Ellen was offered an assistantship position at the University of Minnesota to continue her education, however due to personal reasons she declined it and took a job at Pillsbury. After some time, Berscheid needed a change and decided to apply for an assistantship again, this time accepting a position at the University of Minnesota under Elliot Aronson. Under Aronson, Berscheid completed her Ph. D and began searching for work.

After not being able to find a job in the psychology department, Berscheid took a different route to her career. She began teaching in the Business Department at Minnesota, and it is here her interest in attraction began. Ellen Berscheid's main research interests include: close relationships, emotion, interpersonal attraction, love, romantic relationships, social and sexual attraction, and satisfaction.Her research began with Elaine Hatfield, which was rare during this time as two women did not usually work together. It was for this reason a lot of their work was done privately and kept quiet. While they worked together in studying attraction, they did disagree on many areas as well. Many people wondered if her research in love and emotion was really worth it and if falling in love needed to be studied.

Despite many controversies towards Ellen Berscheid's research, she has made many findings and proved that there were new areas that needed to be researched. She looked at interpersonal relationships and how external factors such as one's social environment can affect a persons relationship. In her current research, he believes that while many people are quick to look at personal causes in a relationship, there may be environmental factors affecting the condition of your relationship.

Berscheid is a decorated social psychologist. Over her career she has won several impressive awards such as the Distinguished Career Award, International Society for the Study of Personal Relationships, 1998, and the Distinguished Scientific Contribution Award, American Psychological Association, 1997. Along with awards she has several journals about her research along with influencing many students, and researchers throughout her career. Berscheid today is a professor and is continuing her research at the University of Minnesota.

Molson27 (talk) 19:58, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

Morgan, I think that your lead section is very good. I wonder if maybe it is too in depth and does not leave a lot of room for discussion in the later paragraphs of the assignement? I wrote my lead section to be a little bit less thorough, so that there would be room for more discussion in the body paragraphs of our article. I liked how you were very concise about all points that will be included in our main body. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Morgan, I think that you have a lot of relevant information here! Much of this lead post could be used in our group one that will soon be conducted. I do agree with Kait that it may be a bit lengthy and over detailed but not far off from what we will create, I'm sure. Great job! Olivia.schwartz (talk) 17:48, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Lead Section- Kaitlin Morgan
Ellen S. Berscheid is an American social psychologist that grew up in Colfax, Wisconsin. Ellen Berscheid began working on her Bachelor's Degree in Education at Beloit College before transferring to the University of Minnesota and adding a psychology major. Berscheid graduated from the University of Minnesota with honors for her double major in Education and Psychology. Berscheid took a job at Pillsbury before accepting an assistantship at the University of Minnesota. Berscheid later became a professor at the University of Minnesota, but then began her research on interpersonal relationships and attraction, and the external factors that influence these relationships. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Kaitlin, I think overall you made a lot of good points on the main things Ellen Berscheid has done in her life, but I feel like you could elaborate a little more. In the beginning you added a lot of information about her education and her degrees but then you only had one sentence about her jobs and her research. I think her research is very important especially when relating it to psychology today so maybe elaborate on this a bit more. I would also recommend changing up the wording a little bit as almost all of your sentences start with her last name so I would add some more variety. I think you have a good start, just need to add some more information.Molson27 (talk) 00:26, 30 October 2018 (UTC)

Kait, I think that you did a great job at covering a lot of her career background. There may be some room for more information but overall, all of this information could be used in constructing the group lead! Olivia.schwartz (talk) 03:42, 30 October 2018 (UTC)

Lead Section- Olivia Schwartz
Ellen S. Berscheid born(1936) is an American social psychologist whom is currently a regents professor at the University of Minnesota, where she earlier had earned her PhD in 1965. She has influenced much research within the topics of interpersonal relationships, emotions and moods, social cognition, and more. Her contributions to social psychology include her books, journals, as well as other forms of publications. She has had some forms of controversy present themselves throughout her career but has overcome the barriers to influence social psychology in a new, refreshing light. Ellen had once possessed a position at Pillsbury company but soon left in hopes to further pursue her psychology interests as an assistant at the University of Minnesota. She has been presented with many different awards in honor of her contributions to social psychology and continues to spread her knowledge lecturing at the University of Minnesota. Olivia.schwartz (talk) 17:42, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Olivia, I like that you included her birthday year in your lead section. I think that this paragraph introduced all of our topics, was concise and flowed very well. I think that we could maybe expand a bit on the controversy portion of this. I think your writing style is great in this, though. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 00:21, 30 October 2018 (UTC)

Olivia, I like how you touched on many areas of Ellen's life just as we did in the outline. I think you gave a good overview of her life, but maybe just elaborate and reorganize a little bit. I would maybe move the information about her Pillsbury job to the beginning when you talked about her current job and how she got where she is. Another suggestion I have for you is adding a little more detail about her research and findings to give people a better idea of what type of things she looked at. Overall I thought you covered many of the main topics that we included in our outline and it was a great start to our lead section. Molson27 (talk) 00:31, 30 October 2018 (UTC)

Dr. Council's comments on Assignment 5
I have added a section heading to make this easier to navigate. That said: Reading your work is just about impossible because you have not bothered to learn basic Wikipedia formatting! I really don't care which editor you use, but you need to master basic formatting before you can complete this project. You might as well do that now.
 * When I look at what you've written in edit mode, I can follow it, but when it is "published," it is jammed together into gobble-di-gook. J.R. Council (talk) 03:45, 24 October 2018 (UTC)
 * I'm giving you partial credit now, and can give full credit when you have formatted properly. Forgive the harsh tone, but at least one of your group should have learned how by now. J.R. Council (talk) 04:16, 24 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Finally, it looks like only one person worked on the outline and reference list. To get full credit, each of you needs to contribute to each section. J.R. Council (talk) 04:16, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

To Do List
-Make to do list and state specific roles for each personMolson27 (talk) 19:08, 28 October 2018 (UTC) -Make outline of what needs to be done to the article -Create lead section (all) -Combine career, interpersonal relationships -elaborate on career section -create the subsection interpersonal relationships -find more sources (2+) for the interpersonal relationships section
 * include personal information
 * what her life is like
 * summary of her work
 * why she is important and her contributions to psychology
 * picture of Ellen Berscheid
 * undergraduate career
 * emotions and relationships
 * how her interest in this and research began
 * main findings
 * people she worked with
 * need more information since this is a whole new section

-elaborate on awards section, update as this article to current time kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * find out what her most current awards are kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * elaborate on what topics she won awards for and the impact it has made kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * has she affected other people in psychology? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

-Add information about her and Elaine Hatfield to controversy section kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Elaine thought it was a waste of money to research why people fall in love kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * How did this affect Ellen's research in the future? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * What were the results of this controversy? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Do people want to learn about love? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Molson27 (talk) 17:43, 24 October 2018 (UTC)

Ellen Berschied Outline
Lead Section (all) Early Career Olivia.schwartz (talk) 02:32, 29 October 2018 (UTC) Career Molson27 (talk) 19:12, 28 October 2018 (UTC)
 * what her life has been like
 * Brief introduction to Ellen
 * Who she is
 * Research Interests
 * Ellen's Contribution to Psychology
 * Undergraduate Career
 * Her work at Pillsbury
 * Why she came to Pillsbury
 * Why she left
 * Going to the University of Minnesota
 * Studying with Elliot Aronson
 * Research Assistantship
 * Clashing during her interview
 * Interpersonal relationshipsMolson27 (talk) 19:13, 28 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Working with Elaine Hatfield
 * How they met
 * How her interest in interpersonal relationships began
 * Two women working together in psychology
 * Have to work quietly
 * Main findings
 * emotions in relationships Molson27 (talk) 19:13, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

Controversy (Kait) kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Was her research grant money worth it? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * What did her research show to others? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

Awards kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC) References Olivia.schwartz (talk) 02:31, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Awards she has been given kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Why was she given these awards? kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Who has honored her kaitmorgan142 (talk) 02:25, 29 October 2018 (UTC)
 * Citations
 * External Links

I will work on the interpersonal relationship section of her career. This will include her working with other psychologists, how she began this topic, and what her findings were through her research. Along with this I will try and add more information and reliable sources to the career section as I feel many details are left currently left out. Molson27 (talk) 19:12, 28 October 2018 (UTC)

I will construct a better range of early career material to add, amongst the existing information on Ellen S. Berschied's current wiki page. Also, I will be adding in the references in which we will use to find relevant information for our reconstruction of our wiki page. Olivia.schwartz (talk) 02:36, 29 October 2018 (UTC)

I will work on the portion about controversy, and will add a section about the awards that Ellen S. Bercheid has been awarded over her lifetime. I also will be trying to find more credible sources about her awards since this is a little discussed topic. kaitmorgan142 (talk) 00:21, 30 October 2018 (UTC)

New References to add: *  *   *   *   *