User:Momo 318/Nine Changes/Babybear444 Peer Review

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Momo 318/Nine Changes


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 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * this is a new article

Evaluate the drafted changes
WOW! Okay, so this is really impressive and detailed. The lead is very strong, and gives a good summary of the major points of the article, which you expand on at length throughout the body. The last sentence in the first paragraph of the "Authorship" section is a little awkward in terms of syntax. I would consider re-wording this. Be careful about putting the citation after the periods of your sentences. You have many citations linked between the last word and the period, which I believe is incorrect style.

The first subheading under content could maybe be reworded-- "gist" doesn't really seem to describe the content of this section. Maybe "Title and Themes," "Title and Influences," or "Title and Translations." ? This is not critical, and I would ask professor if she thinks this is a good title for the section.

The balance is overall very good, and you have very detailed and well structured content. The last section, "Influences" is very short, so if you can find anything else to add to this, that would be good. Maybe you could find another place to include this information, or just make it another subheading as part of a larger section?

Overall, this is an impressive article and very well researched.