User:Momo 318/Nine Changes/Rine02lessthan3 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Momo 318


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Momo%20318/Nine_Changes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Nine Changes

Lead
The lead has been updated with new content by Momo 318. The introductory sentence clearly states the topic and its many names while remaining relatively concise. In general, the lead itself is concise and does not include information that is not expanded upon in the rest of the article. I would say that the lead could be improved further by including Qu Yuan; while this person is not officially regarded as the author of the poems, they are mentioned many times afterwards.

Content
The content added is relevant and very helpful to those reading about the topic. The article as a whole deals with one of Wikipedia's equity gaps; namely, it mentions an East Asian work that is greatly influential and has become canonized. The description of the poem style could be explained in a more straightforward manner; as someone who cannot read Chinese or speak any of its dialects, the meaning of "unstressed" in the language as well as the particles were difficult concepts to grasp.

Tone and Balance
The content added is mostly neutral and specific, except for small phrases such as "some scholars." The additions to the article give equal weight to theories about who authored the poems, although it seems to lean more towards Song Yu than Quan Yu. I think the arguments for each individual's authorship should be more clearly split up into separate paragraphs in the authorship section. Adding Quan Yu to the lead can also help the stance of the article appear more neutral.

Sources and References
There are lots of sources, but a lot of them seem to be by the same author. Some of the links also lead to other Wikipedia pages about the ISBNs instead of the actual sources, which can cause trouble for those trying to find more information on the topic.

Organization
The content is organized and mostly easy to read, except for some small phrases or sections mentioned in various other parts of this peer review. There are some confusingly worded sentences, such as "About this purported author, reliable biographical information is scant now..." These sentences can be easily fixed with some proofreading.

Images and Media
No images or media have been added. A picture of an old copy of the poems or a portrait of one or two of the supposed authors could be a nice addition to add to the sense of historical impact, as well as drive home how old this work is.

Overall Impressions
The article has been greatly improved and made more complete with Momo 318's edits! The content added is very precise and has clearly been well-researched. Momo 318 has also included many more sources and has taken care to word sentences and phrases in more unbiased ways. This new content can mainly be improved by adding more of the elaborated information in the lead, and organizing certain descriptions of authorship and poem style in a manner that is easier to understand.