User:Momoberk/Adolescent literacy/Kholterman Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Morgan Willis


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Momoberk/Adolescent literacy
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:


 * I don't believe there is a lead

Content:


 * The first paragraph has been updated to reflect new content, but the opening sentence has a grammatical error, "it's reach" --> "its reach" (wrong its)
 * The first paragraph is very clear, but might be a little short and repetitive (she is in other section though so might not be done with draft)
 * The content appears up to date
 * Could be more background history and statistics on adolescent illiteracy
 * It deals with equity gaps because there is a gap in literacy levels, but maybe could mention which communities are the most affected by illiteracy

Tone and Balance:


 * The content is neutral, mainly stating facts on early child literacy development
 * The content does seem to persuade the reader to support literacy programs in early development, but that is the point of the organizations being covered so I think it is purposeful and in place

Sources and References:


 * The second hand sources are scholarly and reliable
 * The sources do reflect what the article says
 * The sources do seem to be older (mostly early 2000s) but also they reflect available literature
 * The sources and authors seem very diverse and represent marginalized individuals where possible based on the author's races
 * I think these sources are very thorough, there are not better sources I can think of
 * The links work

Organization:


 * The content is concise and clear
 * Some grammatical errors (first sentence) also "students literacy levels" should be "students' literacy levels"
 * The content is well-organized, could be more sections

Images and Media:


 * Images have not been added yet

New Article:


 * The article is supported by more than 2-3 sources
 * The references list is very substantial
 * The article should link to more articles within the text to make it easier to check sources

Overall Impressions:


 * It is surprising that there is not already a page on adolescent literacy, so I think the creation of this page is very valuable. The article's strength is that it presents clear facts and sections, though the author might consider adding more to the first paragraph and creating a lead paragraph.