User:Momotones/Thallium poisoning/Lbe20 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Momotones


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Momotones/Thallium poisoning - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Thallium poisoning - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

'''I think that your draft was very well written, and the neutrality of the article was there. It fits the Wikipedia style well. It was easy to read and understand, the only comment I have about your lead is maybe include what Thallium is, like a definition that says if it's an element or compound. I think that when it comes to your body paragraphs you are very spot on. Your sources as well are very reliable. I think you could cite them a little more in the body paragraphs. I think that citing things in the paragraph will decrease the chances for your work getting flagged for plagiarism. The sections that you made in the article I think work very well for the breakdown of the article. They make the information easy to find the information you are looking for.'''