User:Moonleigh/Choose an Article

Article Selection
Please list articles that you're considering for your Wikipedia assignment below. Begin to critique these articles and find relevant sources.

Option 1

 * Article title: Food Desert Oasis Act of 2009
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★ Lead Section

The topic is not clearly defined in the introductory sentence. For a student who knows little to this act,


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Option 2

 * Article title: Food Desert
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 * This section seems to be fine, but like the article mentions it should be titled Food Deserts in the United States. My only concern would be that sanitation should also be a factor. I know that certain supermarkets can be unsanitary, and cause populations frequent them less. Perhaps this is further discussed in subsequent sections. I also think that it is not necessary to have food oasis included in the definition of a food desert. Also, the wording in the lead section seems off. "Reduced mobility" seems very ambiguous, and there are words missing that confuse the reader. A majority of the covered sections are mentioned, but the article is overall just a disaster. I do think that the lead section is concise in giving a general overview of the information in the article
 * ☆History
 * Are food deserts commonly seen in suburban areas as well? As well, the author mentions studies that have found a connection to obesity to food availability, however it is not cited. It may have been cited in the beginning sentence, but I think the summary of the findings sound also be cited.
 * As well, this section mentions that food deserts are an urban problem. Supermarkets gravitate towards suburban areas, and cannot be maintained in urban areas.
 * ★Definitions
 * This needs to be put somewhere else. This section ruins the flow of the content. Perhaps place this at the beginning? No, actually the header needs to be changed. The section should be titled something like "components of defining a food desert". As well, why is the author now mentioning that large grocery outlets are included in defining a food desert? I feel like this is drastically different from a supermarket, and must be included in the lead section.
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 * As well, this section mentions that food deserts are an urban problem. Supermarkets gravitate towards suburban areas, and cannot be maintained in urban areas.
 * ★Definitions
 * This needs to be put somewhere else. This section ruins the flow of the content. Perhaps place this at the beginning? No, actually the header needs to be changed. The section should be titled something like "components of defining a food desert". As well, why is the author now mentioning that large grocery outlets are included in defining a food desert? I feel like this is drastically different from a supermarket, and must be included in the lead section.
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