User:Moose1917/Birding in New York City/Nayebean Peer Review

General info
(provide username) Branzino05, BubblyBublik, Moose1917
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Moose1917/Birding_in_New_York_City?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Birding in New York City

Evaluate the drafted changes
Peer review Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects:

Lead

 * In my opinion the lead is pretty good compared to the published article. I say this because your lead for  the article talks more about bird interaction in NYC as opposed to solely discussing the population of birds in NYC and where they are populated. I like that you discussed different aspects of birds in NYC without giving too much detail on these aspects. I think you could include examples for some species interactions that are interesting to you. Not saying to give details on the interaction but more so mention the species itself. Like the different types of birds.

Content

 * While reading the article I noticed there wasn't much information on the section for the bronx. I would like to read more information on bird interactions in the bronx. The bronx zoo is the biggest zoo in nyc so i find it a bit odd that there's more information on manhattan compared to the bronx. Other than that I feel like the content was clear and precise.

Tone and Balance

 * The tone and balance of this article is neutral in my opinion. I felt as if i got good information on bird interactions in nyc. The article isn't persuading an idea so it is pretty good.

Sources and References
The sources and references are accurate. I don't think there was anything wrong and I did not find any plagiarism so it's pretty accurate in my opinion.

Organization
The article you guys are writing is organized very well. I like that you wrote the draft in the sequence its written in the uploaded article. This makes it easier to compare article and the different sections for the article.

Overall impressions
My overall impression of the drafted article is great. I think you guys are doing a great job on editing the article. When I read the lead I knew that the article you're editing will be ten times better. Some areas of the article needs more tweaking like the bronx section but other than that its pretty good.