User:More888/Torngat Mountains National Park/BraedonLW Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

More888, Torngat Mountains National Park


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:More888/Torngat_Mountains_National_Park?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Torngat Mountains National Park

Evaluate the drafted changes
Each section is mostly useful and relevant; however, there isn’t a lead section that gives an overview of each section. The sources are up to date. The tone throughout is neutral.

The description of the park boundaries was relevant. It would be helpful to have a visualisation of the boundaries described in the paragraph. Incorporating a map would give the readers a better idea of the area.

The section on fauna had some good and relevant ecological information. Mentioning the impacts to the Caribou populations is good information; however, the rate of caribou population decline is unclear. Is the Caribou population declining 81% per year over a period of 38 years? Or is 81% the total amount the caribou population has decreased over 38 years? 38 years is also somewhat vague. What is the starting year of measurement? BraedonLW (talk) 06:51, 19 October 2022 (UTC) Having a First Nations section fills one of Wikipedia’s equity gaps. There are paragraphs in the other sections that could possibly be moved to this section.

Some of the information in the section on fauna could have been expanded on. For instance:

“There are various plant species in the Torngat Mountains, such as wildflowers, shrubs and mushrooms (Government of Canada, 2019).”

This information is useful, but mentioning specific species of wildflowers, shrubs, or mushrooms that have been observed in the park would be even better.

Some of the sentences had awkward wording. Rewording these sentences would help with the flow and would make the information clearer for the readers. The awkward sentences are as follows:

“The goal of ecological integrity has been through recent designations addressing the concerns about the Torngat Mountains (Lemelin et al., 2016). These include the isolated and divided range species that could be found in, and human disturbances of the area (Lemelin et al., 2016).”

“In Torngat mountains, caribou, polar bears, and arctic hares are some of the animals found in the area along with bird species and wolves (COSEWIC, 2017; Davis et al., 2020; Lemelin and Maher, 2009). Caribou and wolves are in a prey-predator relationship and caribou depend on lichen in the winter (Davis et al., 2020).”

“Four different climatic regions (i.e., mountain alpine climate, coastal fjords and headlands climate, southern interior valleys climate, and arctic flora) across the Torngat Mountains create ideal environments for various species to live (Government of Canada, 2019).”