User:Morg0078/Family in the United States/Lalis17 Peer Review

Trans experiences are distinct from wider lesbian, gay and bisexual (LGB) experiences. Also, people who identify as transgender are as invested and committed to their families as any other persons, but fear that being trans may alienate and/or destroy their family relationships. (Hafford‐Letchfield, T., Cocker, C., Rutter, D., Tinarwo, M., McCormack, K., & Manning, R. (2019) .  What do we know about transgender parenting?: Findings from a systematic review. Health & Social Care in the Community. https://doi.org/10.1111/hsc.12759).

- Try to rephrase the sentence to avoid “experience” twice 

- 'Not sure if the / between would be appropriate. Might be best to seek better guidance' 

- I recommend using “et al.”, include the year within the first parenthesis opening check paragraphs below as well 

- At the top there’s a “cite” option where you can paste the doi and it will create the reference automatically 

The vast majority of transgender parents report that their relationships with their children are good or positive, including after “coming out” as transgender or transitioning. (Stotzer, R. L., Herman, J. L., & Hasenbush, A. (2014, October). Review of Transgender Parenting: A Review of Existing Research. The Williams Institute. Retrieved 2023, from file:///C:/Users/hopem/Downloads/Trans-Parenting-Review-Oct-2014%20(4).pdf.).

https://doi.org/10.1111/hsc.12759

 - The idea is understandable but rewording it might make it clearer: For example, "The majority of transgender parents report the relationships with their children is good or positive, even after “coming out” as transgender or transitioning." 

Transgender individuals expressed specific desires for parenthood, such as biological relatedness and barriers to parenthood, such as physical limitations or lack of legal protections, which influence how transgender individuals choose to become parents in the future. Participants described wanting to be biologically related to a future child and how this can be complicated by being transgender due to hormonal treatments, surgeries, or not having the biological means of become a parent using “traditional” methods. (Tornello, S. L., & Bos, H. (2017). Parenting intentions among transgender individuals. LGBT Health, 4(2), 115–120. https://doi.org/10.1089/lgbt.2016.0153).

 - In the first sentence, it seems that "biological relatedness" and "barriers to parenthood" (and everything after that) are two different ideas however, putting the "and" between them makes it a bit confusing 

 -Similar to before, arranging the references accordingly. 

General info

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