User:MorganTurchetta/Deafness in Portugal/Kntahaney Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

MorganTurchetta


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:MorganTurchetta/Deafness in Portugal


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hi, Morgan! You've made great progress so far. As a general note, linking key terms/names/events to existing Wikipedia articles throughout your article will be helpful to link readers to more information. This can be done by highlighting a word/phrase and hitting the "link" button at the top of the page, which will bring up a list of suggested existing Wikipedia articles related to the selected term.

I like the current layout of the article and the main headers. It may be helpful to add some subheaders in each section and try to break up those walls of text into smaller segments to make it easier to read.

This article is certainly notable. Your source list is thorough and well-balanced between academic articles and non-academic articles, and all sources are relatively recent. However, I am unable to access many of the sources through the current citations because links aren't provided with many of the journal articles. I'm not sure how to get around this to make more of your sources easily accessible to the general population while abiding by Wikipedia's rules, but this is something I would bring up with Dr. Hall, as it would add a lot of value to the article.

Deafness in Portugal
All of the critical information about the topic is addressed in this lead section. It's a good length. There are a few grammatical errors throughout, but this can easily be addressed in later edits. Also, thank you for referring to Lisboa as such instead of Lisbon! It irritates me so much that the US has changed place names like this.

DHH History
Acknowledging the influence of Christianity in Portugal is really important, and I'm glad you brought it up. The statement you make about Christianity and deaf people being viewed as demons in the 15th century I'm sure is accurate, but may be inflammatory. Perhaps further mention of the continued influence of Christianity and its effect on DHH people in Portugal more recently would help to balance this statement out.

Mentioning the 1880 Milan Conference by name and/or linking to the existing Wikipedia article on it would be a valuable addition to this section.

Provide a specific source for the quote taken from the constitution, preferably linking to the text of the constitution itself rather than a third-party article about it.

Information about the deaf organizations in Portugal/the EU and their role in the progression of rights for DHH people would be valuable. These organizations are first mentioned in your article under "DHH Community," but I think it's okay to include information about them throughout the article.

Overall, this seems to hit the major milestones and provide a comprehensive overview of the history of DHH people in Portugal.

DHH Education
This provides a thorough history of DHH education. Additional information about how many deaf-only schools exist and where, as well as accessibility of these schools to students throughout the country, would be useful. Any more specific information you can find about higher education would also be helpful. This would also be a good place to discuss career opportunities or lack thereof.

DHH Community
The information included here is all relevant. Additional information regarding the integration of DHH adults into society would be beneficial.

Medical Treatment
I like the variety of sources that you've cited in this section. Additional information about accessibility of cochlear implants would be good to include. Statistics about the use of cochlear implants and about the percentage of DHH babies identified would be great if you can find them.

Overall, the information included throughout this article is relevant, thorough, and neutrally presented. Don't be afraid to have a citation linked on nearly every sentence, as there is a lot of new information referenced. I've mentioned in each section additional information that would be nice to include, but you've done a great job!