User:Morganelisabeth/Unsafe abortion/RaDaSun Peer Review

Morgan's peer Review
I would like to start off by saying that your writing style is very professional and easy to read/understand! I do have a few suggestions though. Some of your sentences in the first paragraph could be considered run-on sentences. This is only a MINOR issue that should only need a couple of commas! :) Your second leading paragraph is super strong and well thought out, but I think you may have missed a few words in a sentence (However the response from Activion didn't "failed to respond by the deadline set by the organizing workers, writing that “unfortunately, the parties could not reach an agreement”).

I don't normally follow stuff like this but what your writing about has definitely caught my attention. I think that you're going to come out with a GREAT article!

Raheem's Peer review
First off you did great adding current data used for people commenting unsafe abortions. I never knew that people would commit unsafe abortions, because of unsafe practices or fear of pregnancy. I do however have some quality add on for you to put into your article. First I would add data from no later than 2019 to get the most recent unsafe abortion data. It gives current scope of where people are at with unsafe abortions. Next I would add cites from the places you got this data at the of sentences. Wikipedia gets really upset when you don't cite quotes or data. Once you have done that you should be on the right track for turning this bad boy in. Good work!