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Article Evaluation
- Everything in this article about Conwell-Egan Catholic High School is somewhat relatable, it misses a lot of information that could be added to the article as well. - While reading the article I was distracted by one thing in particular. The author did not talk about any activities that go on at this school. Sports teams, dance teams, and many other things are a big part of a education and there wasn't much of that in this article. - The viewpoints of this article would be underrepresented. Yes, they do provide information about the current principal and when the school was established but not much more then that. - The citations of this article are accessible but, there are several references on the bottom of the page regarding a congressman, and a old football coach from what seems to be listed. - The information is not out of date, but there are many references in the article that aren't even talked about in the article. It seems as if they have a few things missing that should be in the article. - On the talk page there are only two discussions. Both are to add certain references to the page. This may be why the page has several different references that aren't talked about in the article. - The article is rated as "start-class". It also has a rating from WikiProjects, and the rating is "mild" - In certain ways, the article does provide information to inform and educate any audience about the High School. However there are some details left out of the article, and there could be more information added to make a better article.

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Article Proposal and Bibliography
The article written about Conwell-Egan Catholic is missing very important details about the school. I know this because I was once a student at Conwell-Egan Catholic. When I was in Conwell-Egan I was apart of a few different activities. Even the ones I didn't participate in were still really big at my high school. This is a big reason why I believe I can change the article to make it more appealing to the public to read. For example, at Conwell-Egan Catholic have a annual dance event called "spirit night". Spirit Night has been a tradition for years at Conwell-Egan. My father went to Conwell-Egan and participated in spirit night. Spirit Night is a three night event, that goes Thursday through Saturday. The school is split into two teams. (Blue and White) Each team makes up a total of 8 dances split half and half between a freshman/sophomore category, and a junior/senior category. Every year there is a overall theme, and that is where the ideas of the dances are originated. I think adding Spirit Night to this article shows Conwell-Egan Catholics uniqueness. Knowing that Spirit Night has been a tradition at Conwell-Egan that my dad, uncles, aunts, and cousins have participated in. It has been a big part of the school for generations, and the school even has its own week dedicated to the Spirit Night event. Another thing that I think should be added to the article is about the schools football team. The history of the football team is a great history. My dad also was included in several winning games all four years of high school. Throughout my four years of high school I was a cheerleader for the football cheer team, and also the competition team. The last three years of high school my competitive cheer team went to states, and this past year they won 1st place best varsity dance! Throughout cheering for football we had many winning games, but also some loses. My senior year our Eagles had close to an undefeated season, and won district champions. There is so much more too Conwell-Egan Catholic besides one winning basketball championship, and a few old history facts. The school is unique on its own, and the school form life long friendships for everyone that passes through the halls. Conwell-Egan Catholic has had several athletes to go Division II and even some Division 1 sports players. Academics has also been a very important topic at Conwell-Egan Catholic. There is NHS, which also comes along with community service work. Even though the grammar is correct, and all of the material in the article is correct, there are so many things that can be added to the article. By adding these many pieces of information too the article, I hope to make it more appealing to the public, and also for people to be more interested in the school. The article seemed very vague to me the first time I read it. Every high school in the country has activities wether you are a performing arts school, or just a regular high school. I believe that these sports and activities are what make a school interesting and also appealing. Why not acknowledge a school for its uniqueness? By picking this article I learned that there isn't just more to Conwell-Egan Catholic, but there is much more to any other high school. Most pages on here will just have a vague few paragraphs about a high school, just talking about when it was established, and how many students are enrolled. By adding these things to the article it will show what the school is really about, and what things they have going on inside of the building rather then just what has gone down in the history of the high school.

Feedback from Dr. Vetter - Hey Morgan. Great work on this proposal. I think you've chosen a good article to work on and that you will be able to improve it drastically and meaningfully. Some advice: Because you have individual experience and knowledge about the high school, you have to be careful to only add information that you can gather from a secondary source. No original research! Don't worry though. When you write about this assignment in the academic/reflectie essay we're doing later on you can talk more about your own experience and knowledge of the high school and what it was like to have to do secondary research on the topic. To get ideas for how this article should be developed, you might want to take a look at a well-developed article about a high school. We can work and finding an article like that for you. Also, please be sure to diversify your sources by using newspapers and other secondary articles about the school. Don't rely too much on the school website, and don't use original research.

So plan on adding at least three new sections: one on Academics, one on Athletics, and one on Events and Activities with further development in each of these.

You've done a really nice job with this proposal!

Article Draft
Conwell-Egan Catholic Highschool

History

Conwell-Egan Catholic High School's history began in 1957 as Bishop Egan High School, a co-institutional school located on Levittown Parkway in Levittown, Pennsylvania. August of 1957, the new faculty of Conwell-Egan Catholic was assigned. The principle was, Father Regis Stafford, and the other staff included seven priests, eight sisters, and one layman. The brand-new school opened on September 5th, 1957. The attendance was 353 fresh-man, and 254 sophomore students.

In 1966, because of the burgeoning population in the Lower Bucks County area, Bishop Egan was separated into two schools: Bishop Egan for boys, located in a new facility in Fairless Hills, and Bishop Conwell for girls, located in the original building in Levittown. The girls school Bishop Conwell was opened in 1965.

Twenty-six years later, in 1993, the two schools were merged to form Conwell-Egan Catholic High School. During the 90s the Archdiocese allowed the students to an open enrollment policy, meaning the students preferring to go to a Catholic school could choice which catholic school in the Archdiocese they pleased.

On January 6, 2012, the Archdiocese of Philadelphia announced that Conwell-Egan Catholic, along with three other Catholic high schools in the Philadelphia region, would permanently close at the end of the 2011-2012 school year. [3]

Conwell-Egan Catholic appealed the decision to the Archdiocese, citing the fact that it is the only Catholic high school in Lower Bucks County. Major efforts were put in place to save the school, including the raising of over 3 million dollars. On February 24, nearly seven weeks after the closing announcement, Archibishop Chaput announced that Conwell-Egan and the three other high schools slated to close would remain open. Archbishop Chaput's reasons for keeping the school open were the major fundraising efforts and support from current students, parents, teachers, and alumni.

On November 15th, 2017 students, teachers, staff, and alumni of Conwell-Egan Catholic, were surprised and excited to receive the gift of a 5 million dollar grant. They received the grant from Danaher Lynch Family Foundation. The foundation that was donated the money was establish by Tom Lynch and his wife Patty to help support Catholic school education in the surrounding areas. Conwell-Egan Catholic later released that they would be using the donation to fund sport scholarships, creating a center for student leadership, infrastructure of the school, and also anything they can do to improve the catholic education the provide for their students. 

Conwell-Egan Catholic continues its mission of providing the best possible Catholic education for secondary students in the Lower Bucks County area and beyond.

Academics

Conwell-Egan Catholic High School offers a comprehensive curriculum, with some students opting to take Honors and Advanced Placement (AP) courses. It is the purpose of the academic program at Conwell-Egan Catholic to develop students’ abilities and talents by preparing them for post secondary education.

Conwell-Egan Catholics education is opened to all types of religions, but does require each student to attend all theology classes needed to graduate the high school.

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Sports: (these sources are coming from the student handbook

[null Conwell-Egan Catholic has several extracurricular activities and sports teams. On] March 21, 2015 the boys’ basketball team won the PIAA class AA State Championship. This was the school's first basketball state title.[5]

Conwell-Egan Catholic has several extracurricular activities and sports teams. The school has 20 athletics teams, and 23 current extra-curricular organizations and clubs.

Spirit Night:

“Spirit Night is the Most Anticipated Student Event of the Year”. Spirit Night brings the entire school against each other in competition and is almost completely student run. The school is split into two teams blue and white. The first half of the alphabet is on white, and the other half on blue. All the way from January to April, the students mix music, decorate costumes, learn dances, paint giant murals, and invent sports games for the sport section of the night.

Article Edits- Autumn Marlin
The article is written and broken into different sub-categories very well! The information is provided in a clear and easy to understand manor. Most of the minor edits I'm finding are grammatical, specifically oxford commas. Also, the lead seems slightly informal. I would recommend being more straightforward with the information. Rather than saying the "schools history began in.." try something along the lines of "Conwell-Egan Catholic High School's opened their doors in..". The "Spring night" paragraph is slightly confusing. Adding or moving the information about what the actual event is in the beginning, rather than at the end might help. Is it during the day or an over night event? I understand that students create things for the event but what is the event in its entirety? Do students create these things in classes, in after school activities or on their own? That section was really the only one that i had questions about, otherwise, it's very well done!

Article Final Draft:

Conwell-Egan Catholic Highschool

History

Conwell-Egan Catholic High School's history began in 1957 as Bishop Egan High School, a co-institutional school located on Levittown Parkway in Levittown, Pennsylvania. In August of 1957, the new faculty of Conwell-Egan Catholic was assigned. The principle at this time was Father Regis Stafford. Other staff included seven priests, eight sisters, and one layman. The brand-new school opened on September 5, 1957. The attendance was 353 fresh-man, and 254 sophomore students. In 1966, because of the burgeoning population in the Lower Bucks County area, Bishop Egan was separated into two schools: Bishop Egan for boys, located in a new facility in Fairless Hills, and Bishop Conwell for girls, located in the original building in Levittown. The girls school Bishop Conwell was opened in 1965. Twenty-six years later, in 1993, the two schools were merged to form Conwell-Egan Catholic High School. During the 90s the Archdiocese allowed the students to an open enrollment policy, meaning the students preferring to go to a Catholic school could choice which catholic school in the Archdiocese they pleased. On November 15th, 2017 students, teachers, staff, and alumni of Conwell-Egan Catholic, were surprised and excited to receive the gift of a 5 million dollar grant. They received the grant from Danaher Lynch Family Foundation. The foundation that was donated the money was establish by Tom Lynch and his wife Patty to help support Catholic school education in the surrounding areas. Conwell-Egan Catholic later released that they would be using the donation to fund sport scholarships, creating a center for student leadership, infrastructure of the school, and also anything they can do to improve the catholic education the provide for their students. Conwell-Egan Catholic continues its mission of providing the best possible Catholic education for secondary students in the Lower Bucks County area and beyond.

Academics

Conwell-Egan Catholic High School offers a comprehensive curriculum, with some students opting to take Honors and Advanced Placement (AP) courses. It is the purpose of the academic program at Conwell-Egan Catholic to develop students’ abilities and talents by preparing them for post-secondary education. Conwell-Egan Catholics education is opened to all types of religions, but does require each student to attend all theology classes needed to graduate the high school.

Sports and Extracurricular Activities

Conwell-Egan Catholic High School has 20 athletic teams, and 23 extracurricular activities. 80% of Conwell-Egan participates in at least one athletic sport, or an extracurricular. There are several activities from a football program, to the mathletes club. The school’s colors are royal blue and white, and the mascot is an Eagle. Conwell-Egan also has an extracurricular activity called “Spirit Night’ that several students participate in. “Spirit Night is the Most Anticipated Student Event of the Year”. This event brings the entire school against each other in a competition and is almost completely student run. (all reference from the student hand book) The High School is divided into two teams to make a Blue team and a White team. The students are split by the alphabet leaving the first half of the alphabet to the white team, and the second half of the alphabet to the blue team. Every year a different theme is selected for students to prepare dances for, with mixed music, costumes, and art work. Students start rehearsing and organizing art work, student dances, and sports games in January. Spirit Night is finally pulled together by the end of April when the students present their dances that they have prepared. Around 3,000 people fill the audience over the three nights of Spirit Night cheering for the students as the present their dances. This upcoming year will be Conwell-Egan’s 31st annual Spirit Night tradition.