User:Moro0239/Inca cuisine/Pethomp Peer Review

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MoroO239
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Moro0239/Inca cuisine
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Inca cuisine

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think the lead does a great job of kind of summarizing the content of the article so that the view knows if they will find what they are looking for, which I really appreciated. All of the sources are relatively new, so we know that the information they used is relevant. I didn't dig too deep, but all of the articles also appear to be good sources. I found the content to be well written and concise, and didn't use any language that was persuasive in nature. No other media forms were added, but I think it could be cool to include any that you may find as actually looking at the foodstuffs could be very informative and interesting. I also really appreciate how you made notes of places in the text that you want to return to/rephrase. This helped me to understand which parts were incomplete and which weren't. It seems like in a few places you could go into more detail though. For example, describing how they stored food, I was curious as to what exactly they did. In addition, if I am going to be nit picky, there is a place where you say "most impressive", which doesn't seem like the most neutral statement. so maybe you could try to rephrase somehow?

Overall, I think this article does a great job of laying out all of the information so that the reader can know what to look for, and I think it has really great cohesion. I think overall you could go into a bit more detail in some places, but overall, it is off to a great start!