User:Mosadzi1/LGBT people in prison/Ahowel10 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mosadzi1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mosadzi1/LGBT_people_in_prison?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT people in prison

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Content

The content added to this article is highly relevant. I liked the discussion of gender-affirming care, specifically the explanation that such care includes "medical (non-surgical), social, and surgical interventions."

The content is up-to-date. I see you cited to Estelle v. Gamble. If there are any recent cases citing to Estelle v. Gamble, including the links to those cases would further show that the case is good law and up-to-date.

No content seems to be missing, and the topics discussed are thorough.

Tone and Balance

The content is well-written and neutral in tone overall. However, one sentence could potentially be viewed as biased: "Equally important to affirming transgender people’s right to self-determination is respect for grooming and gender presentation." While I of course do not disagree with this statement, it could be useful to rewrite the sentence as: "It has been opined that respect for grooming and gender presentation is equally important to affirming transgender people's rights to self-determination." This re-write, followed by a supporting citation, would make this citation more neutral and not reflective of your personal opinion.

Sources and References

There are various citations to case law, which is good, but I would just ensure that a citation is included to a google scholar version of the case or to the state court's opinion. That way, individuals without access to Westlaw or Lexis will have no trouble searching for the source.

The sources cited are reliable and upon clicking on each, they appear to be up-to-date.

Organization

The content is well-written and while several sentences are rather lengthy, there does not appear to be a way to cut them shorter or re-write. The writing is overall concise.

There are no notable grammatical errors. One issue I did note has been highlighted in bold: Gender-affirming healthcare is widely regarded as a "life-saving" practice. Various U.S. court cases address the constitutionality of denying transgender prisoners gender-affirming healthcare, including hormone therapy, mental healthcare, gender-related, reconstructive, and “sexual reassignment” surgery, and grooming.


 * If you can see, the two phrases I bolded above are surrounded by quotes which are in different fonts.

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