User:Mosadzi1/LGBT people in prison/Heyitsjami Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mosadzi1


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mosadzi1/LGBT_people_in_prison?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * LGBT people in prison

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead is concise, to the point, and clearly reflects the new content that has been added. It does a great job of describing the sections of the article. However, there doesn't seem to be one particular sentence that sums the entire idea of the article up.

Content:

The content added is relevant to the topic and up to date. I believe that the topic could be considered one of Wikipedia's equity gaps, and it does address a topic that relates to a historically underrepresented population.

Tone and Balance:

The article is written in a neutral tone, and does not appear to favor any one position over another. The content does not attempt to persuade the reader to pick a side.

Sources and References:

The source links that I checked all appeared to work. The majority of the sources cited are cases - while this is persuasive, it might be a good idea to diversify and add different types of secondary sources. All of the sources are accurate, relevant, and up to date.

Organization:

The content is very well-written and well-organized. There are no outstanding grammar or spelling issues that I notice.

Overall impressions:

The work done here is very solid and well done. The main improvements I would suggest to include would be to add a sentence that explains the whole topic in the lead and to diversify the secondary sources used.