User:Moth1999/Perigi's Wonderful Dolls/Etaylor6sfsu Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Moth1999


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Moth1999/Perigi's_Wonderful_Dolls?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * N/A

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is very strong because the first sentence is concise yet detailed enough to give an overview of most of the vital information about the article. The second sentence of the lead is also great because it introduce a fascinating topic that may be unfamiliar to most and makes the reader want to continue.

All of the content in the article is relevant. The synopsis is is thorough and provides a detailed but manageable summary of the episode. Some sentences in the synopsis have a vague/weak subject that gets introduced after an adjective-phrase, but simple switches are a quick fix! The synopsis is already really strong.

The "cast" section is up-to-date with working and correct links as well as the rest of the article's citations. The "Connections with 'The Twilight Zone'" section is very detailed and also provides relevant information to the article as a whole, and does a great job of connecting the information back to the lead in the beginning of the page.

The last section of sources includes real and relevant references that are correctly cited and provide backup context for the article as a whole. Since it's a new article altogether, the sources help give it credibility. The organization also helps the article since, aesthetically, it's got a familiar format. The article also links to another article that relates to this one and it makes it more likely to be reached by a larger audience.

Overall, the article is wonderfully organized and every new heading flows from the last to create a cohesive structure.

There are no images in the article, but if possible, correctly cited and relevant images would be a great addition to help catch the readers' eyes and help break up the page full of text. Although everything is already concise and easy to read, images are always a nice touch!

Ultimately, this is a great article that's been created! The structure and information is very strong and a great read overall. The strengths of the article are definitely in the synopsis since it's so well-written, and in the section relating it to "The Twilight Zone" since that's a very well-known series that can boost this article's views as well. With the simple subject/predicate switches in the sentences in the synopsis and an image or two if possible, this article will be very successful!