User:Motley1023/Constance Baker Motley/Literally Legally Blonde Peer Review

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(provide username) Motley1023
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 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Motley1023/Constance Baker Motley
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 * Constance Baker Motley:

Evaluate the drafted changes
The Lead: So far, the sandbox draft seems to only include the lead of the article copied and pasted. I do think it is a good idea to compare Thurgood Marshall's article and his lead to Constance Baker Motley's lead. One piece of advice I have is to only include the most significant aspects of her career in the lead, not going longer than one paragraph. This is because the more you add to the lead, the more diluted the critical information about them is. Put the details in the article body.

Otherwise, the lead is pretty well written. Some of the sentences are standing alone too short to be its own paragraph.

The Body: I think this article provides a great start for furthering the Wiki page for Constance Baker Motley. However, some of this information could definitely be expanded upon. The section on Political and Judicial Firsts could definitely be expanded. I also think there should be a subheading beneath that section for gender discrimination, racial discrimination, and political climate. Good coverage on her notable cases and their impact. Good coverage on her awards. Add the associations she was in as well. Good coverage over her personal life. Legacy is an interesting heading. I would perhaps change it to Political and Social Impact or something of that nature. The References are very broad pulling from many sources already.