User:Movingqlong/Ice crystals/ChemEnjoyer Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Movingqlong


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Movingqlong/Ice_crystals?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Ice crystals

Lead
The lead is still concise and gives a great idea of what the article is about! The little extra content given about what ice crystals do in the atmosphere will help readers establish context for the topic, too!

Content
The new content is all helpful, and expands the article nicely! Rearranging the content that was already on the page also helped make the article more readable. Almost all the original content has been retained, but the one sentence describing the how mixed patterns form could possibly be incorporated as well. (assuming a source can be found for it!)

Tone and Balance
The article's overall tone remains neutral and expository, which is very good! One thing to maybe look out for are adverbs for timing, such as "recently", for work that has already been done. It is not necessary to have this descriptor since the emphasis should be on the work rather than when the work was done. (In this instance, the work done "recently" is from 2015 which also might not qualify as recent anymore.)

Organization
The new content is easy to read, and the rewritten content also works effectively and is easier to read than before. There's no errors in the writing and the sections have been divided up well. Adding the old geometry section to the formation section was also a great idea! One suggestion to consider is maybe making a separate weather phenomena section. It seems like the paragraph on weather could be separated off from formation, but you know this topic better so it's up to your discretion!

Images and Media
The images help to visualize ice crystals and their effects well, and have good captions. They also all follow Wikipedia's copyright rules.

Overall Impressions

 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall, the article is better. It is easier to read and has more information about ice crystals than before. All the content has good sources and is more concise, giving more information with a similar word count. Improving the article further would involve expanding more on the information already given, such as expanding on the discovery of square ice crystals and describing any uses for them, if any. the article is quite good overall!