User:Mpatel48/Manipulation (psychology)/Tolber2K Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mpatel48


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mpatel48/Manipulation (psychology)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Manipulation (psychology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hello! The lead section certainly looks much more fleshed out with a greater feeling towards a professional tone. While a professional tone is important, try to keep in mind that lay audiences will also be reading. The Manipulation and Mental illnesses portion looks much better than it was before. The separate list plus the definitions was a good thing to keep as well. Psychopathy in the workplace could use a little more development. It may just need to be removed in its entirety as it seems slightly out of place.