User:Mpf53/Sickle cell disease/Rhya Evans Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Morré Taylor, Amb543, Rowanmoreland


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Mpf53/Sickle cell disease


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sickle cell disease

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * The lead section has not been updated but in the last paragraph of the lead there could maybe be a reference of Uganda as an example of an African country with high prevalence of sickle cell disease.

Content, Tone and Balance, Sources and References


 * The content is great and very relevant to the topic!
 * Your drafted changes are very well written, easy to understand, and neutral.
 * All your sources are reliable and very recent.

Organization


 * It could help to have the second paragraph first as it helps introduce Uganda and the context of sickle cell disease in the country more broadly (i.e. 5th highest burden globally), followed by the paragraph currently first and finally the third paragraph.
 * Additionally, will this be added as a sub-subsection under Africa in the Epidemiology section?

Overall, these look like great and valuable additions. Amazing job!