User:Mrgabr14/Leon Shenandoah/NathalyT Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

@Mrgabr14


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mrgabr14/Leon_Shenandoah?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Leon Shenandoah
 * Leon Shenandoah

Lead

 * Yes, the lead has been updated to reflect the updated content. For instance, the newly added sources in the updated content are also added along the lead creating more credibility along with the infobox added which summarizes Leon Shenandoah's life, origins, and relatives.
 * The first sentence in the lead does summarize Shenandoah's political career which is the main focus of the article.
 * The lead does not mention Shenandoah's beliefs which is the second section in the article, try adding a sentence and connecting it to the first few sentences in the lead! Also the sentence about gambling kinda catches the reader off guard, try tying it to the sentence before a bit more or vaguely elaborate why he opposed it.
 * Shenandoah's speech given in 1985 mentioned in the lead is not mentioned in the article.
 * Overall, the lead is concise.

Content

 * Yes, the content added is relevant to the topic!
 * Yes, content added is up-to-date.
 * No, all the content added is all connected and matches each heading,
 * Yes, Leon Shenandoah is part of a unrepresentative population.
 * Overall, I really like the added links throughout the article. Everything seems to be in chronological order and nothing confusing or out of place sentences stick out!

Tone and Balance

 * Yes, the content is neutral.
 * No, there are no claims that seem to be biased toward a position.

Sources and References

 * The sections "Death" and "Years of Tadodaho" most of it is paraphrased well but, just to make sure I'd cite it to be safe!
 * I couldn't really access the sources in the reference section to check the content, but it seems credible. There's a lot of citing from reliable newspapers such as New York Times and Washington Post.
 * Yes, sources are current. And those that are from later times are from credible newspapers.

Organization

 * Yes, all the content is concise and clear. All the headings are clear and content in those sections relate to the heading.
 * I did not find any error!
 * Yes it is broken down in chronological order from Shenandoah's early life to adult life and accomplishments to his death.

Images and Media

 * No media or images are added!

Overall Impressions

 * Yes, the added content has greatly improved the article.
 * A strength of the article is definitely the sources provided and how much the content is backed up by the sources!
 * A way to add content to the article is to elaborate a bit more on certain topics such as Great Law of Peace under "Years of Tadodaho." Although its linked, elaborate why Shenandoah though it would weaken the Haudenosaunee's sovereignty. Along with why Shenandoah refused to listen to federal govt such as the arrest warrant.