User:Mrichardson4/Sherlock Holmes/FryWrites Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Roghikt Turquoise98 Mrichardson4


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Editing User:Mrichardson4/Sherlock Holmes - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sherlock Holmes - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * 1) Lead
 * 2) Good job at explaining exactly how your contribution will be expanding the article as a whole, and what the main part of your section is going to be. It makes it clear from the beginning what the reader will be learning.
 * 3) Content
 * 4) This really helps to further expand on the already existing article, and provides interesting context for possible messages that Arthur Conan Doyle was writing about. It is relevant even today, although I do feel that sources specifically talking about the relevance of this issue today could help to further expand your contribution and engage the reader further.
 * 5) Tone and Balance
 * 6) You do a great job on balancing the new information that you bring in with the analysis that you provide, and there are places where you do a decent job of keeping your tone as neutral as possible. There are a few places where the ton shifts into a more argumentative tone than an information and unbiased tone, although this is difficult to avoid completely.
 * 7) Sources
 * 8) Your sources all seem to have come from reliable places and have links provided, which is great. They seem to be have written by a variety of different authors that have different backgrounds and knowledge areas as well, which helps to make your case as well.
 * 9) Organization
 * 10) Your flow is good, and you have very few (if any) grammar mistakes. The way your addition is formatted makes it fairly easy to follow, and there is no point where the reader gets hopelessly lost. Your section will also tie into the already existing article in an interesting way with little or no conflict.
 * 11) Overall
 * 12) You guys have a really great start to your addition, with a lot of really strong qualities to it. The main thing that I would suggest is potentially trying to find a source that relates it to more present day issues, and also to make sure to keep your tone as neutral as possible.