User:Mrichardson4/Sherlock Holmes/Tackeret Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Mrichardson4, Turquoise98, Roghikt


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Mrichardson4/Sherlock_Holmes?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

The lead could be shortened to be more concise and fit the other length of the leads in the other wiki sections on the page. I think a big part in the lead that I noticed that could also go along with content, is that there are some sentences that could be shortened by adding the later information in. For example, the part about "Various prominent authors have identified these related themes throughout the works of Sherlock Holmes" could list the authors there and have it flow later on when they are brought up, or even merge the end part of this sentence with your upcoming point.

Content:

The content is easy to understand and stays focused on the main text, I do think there is some repeating words being used and a lot of words that could be removed. I think that is the biggest part about this draft is clearing it up and trying to make it shorter.

Tone and Balance:

The tone is very informative and does a good job of staying away from being biased. I think this is supported by focusing on the texts and proving it with the sources and references.

Sources and References:

The links are correct for this article draft. The linked sources are also appropriate and reliable sources, I believe a few more could be helpful in backing up the information, that way it comes off as a well known and backed up discussion rather than reusing the same sources in multiple parts next to each other.

Organization:

I think that the points do get a little lost with how long the paragraphs are. If there were shorter paragraphs with each idea stated it would help the reader understand and stay engaged.

Overall Impressions: Overall, this is an impressive draft and has a lot of work put into it. I think the biggest thing I would fix is making it more concise.